Montins Uv Loove

Thir montins that stooid beffoir me
Ma lassie milk soumes breasts
Ah leid upoun heir ballye ye sei
Fir the displey uv heir peaks are the best

Ma lassie ballye moves up and doon
As the watters  on the occeane
Bwte thir fyrmeness if ma lassie’s mounds
And ma lassie’s nosthrils blaw betwixt them a coul  wynd

Ah knou theer ayre seevan wondirs
Thir warld is prude tae shaw
Bwte thir onis thit ah laye undyr
Na oni ells wull evir knou


Original poem:

The mountains that stood before me
Her creamy white breasts
I lay upon a belly you see
For the view of her summits are the best

Her belly moves up and down 
As the waters on the seas
But the stillness of her mounds
And her nostrils blow between them a cool breeze

I know there are seven wonders
The world it proud to show
But the ones that I lay under
No one else will ever know

 (Sista's Bloody Sista's/ England, Scotland, Wales & Ireland. Deborah Guzzi contest)
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Haick Avatar
November 3, 2010 at 10:30 PM
Congratulations on your extraordinary win in the contest, Sidney! Worthy of Ist Place, definitely.....Always, Audrey
Bagnall Avatar
November 3, 2010 at 5:57 AM
Amusing poem, and congrats on the win. I'm not entirely sure when Deb's specified something that happened in England betweeen 1300 & 1800 that she had procreation was on her mind :) well done !
Kendrick Avatar
November 1, 2010 at 4:29 PM
Congratulations on your win..Sara
Devonshire Avatar
November 1, 2010 at 12:46 PM
Awesome use of the dialect, Sidney, and this poem deserves the top spot in Deb's contest. Congratulations! Love, Carolyn
Coulstock Avatar
November 1, 2010 at 9:17 AM
Hi Sidney.Two for the price of one,that can't be bad!I love them both,but the lilt of the Scottish dialect just has the edge for me.Very good, very clever and deserving of your win.Well done. Love June
Richards Avatar
November 1, 2010 at 8:16 AM
Hooray for you, Sidney.....Congratulations on your first place win....this was a challenge you met head-on!! Well done!
Mehta Avatar
November 1, 2010 at 5:14 AM
Congratulations on this well deserved win in the contest, Sidney
Guzzi Avatar
October 31, 2010 at 5:16 PM
I must be the first to congradulate you! You're #1 though there were folks who wrote more, yours was true to both the style of the era and the dialect and in all honesty made me swoon.....Shakespeare would have hired you ;) Light & Love
Coulstock Avatar
October 10, 2010 at 4:35 PM
Hi Sidney. Thars nae a puir writ that ye gie us!Thanks for the interpretation.I've been googling like mad to write an entry,not easy,ma heid hurts.I might take a different slant altogether now.But gid luck wi this ma wee Rabbi-or is it Robbie-Burns. Aw Gawd my 'ed 'urts even worse nah-getting a split personality-All the best to you. luv June
Murphy Avatar
October 2, 2010 at 12:44 PM
good luck in the contest well done and have a great weekend thanks for your comments faleshia
Dietrich Avatar
October 1, 2010 at 11:20 AM
Is the original your poem too, Sydney. Wow, it reads amazingly good. (and the only one I can read as well, haha) This is one contest I am sure I will not be trying. Then again, maybe it's easy to use these dialect translation devices?? Very good poem. LUv, Andrea
Kendrick Avatar
October 1, 2010 at 10:01 AM
Good luck in the contest with this one ...Reads like a winner to me..I can't read the Irish, Welsh, and English dialect part though..Good job..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..Sara
Culverhouse Avatar
October 1, 2010 at 6:07 AM
good work!!
Mehta Avatar
October 1, 2010 at 5:51 AM
I enjoyed the the write written in lingo than the original won, as I read the lingo of Robert Hinslaw and Chris, Sidney
Falotico Avatar
October 1, 2010 at 5:40 AM
This is great my friend, a wonderful entry ...Michael
Neels Avatar
October 1, 2010 at 4:28 AM
Wow! You did this with so much of ease Mr. H! love it, good luck to you with Deb's contest ;) Wilma
Palli Avatar
September 30, 2010 at 11:19 PM
Loved it! So much talent! thanks for the comments on Gym Class
Guzzi Avatar
September 30, 2010 at 7:27 PM
YES, yev doone it me laddie! V'ry nicely ta. Light & Love and thanks for the kind comments on my writes!
Roberts Avatar
September 30, 2010 at 7:16 PM
fantastic, good luck in the contest, i love it
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