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Monsters of the Sea A contracted seafarer...concerning no servile rank, kept e'er involved watch...away from menial daily tasks top deck, while steadfast wary of...the diligent taskmaster's whip. A dawn swift gust...brushes the ship from a rocky pillar, duly rallies from rest...aids calamitous bellows from crow's nest, witnessed by crew...rose an angel disguised with devil horns. Seawater laps feverishly...against ship's wooden hull, as panic over breed minds...once sturdy legs go feebly about, cascading thoughts grips privately...every man for himself. Another abrupt action...frees a churning sea expounds, and an opening hole...devouring anything within its midst, as desperation consumes...a ship has long met its doom. A lone selfless soul of limited else...moved past the lost, and hastily clutched a burdened javelin...and hoist it upwards, with his petitioned combined strength...released the deadly blow. Her dying scream...was drowned out by restored happy voices, and a wealth of well-wishes and praises...honoring accolades, as lone eyes of a humble sort...gaze a siphoning pass. 2020 August 02 *1st Place* STRAND COMPLETELY NEW (17),any form,any theme ~~Brian Strand

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Date: 8/8/2020 11:43:00 AM
wow, top spot for this exciting tale of the sea! Congratulations, william.
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William Kekaula
Date: 8/8/2020 11:52:00 AM
Thanks, Andrea, for truly reading my yarn, comment and accolades, Aloha! William
Date: 8/6/2020 10:04:00 AM
A true seafarers tale, William, told in the style of a seafarers yarn. I could feel the sea, the waves, the desperation and the relief of victory. Wonderful story telling! Congratulations on your first place!
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William Kekaula
Date: 8/6/2020 10:43:00 AM
Thanks, Sam, for your decency in reading my poem, your commenting, and accolades, Aloha! William
Date: 8/5/2020 7:29:00 PM
I spent three months close to the sea and understand it in a better way... Excellent write...congratulations on your win William.
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William Kekaula
Date: 8/5/2020 7:33:00 PM
Thanks for your comment and accolades, Mitra, Aloha! William
Date: 8/5/2020 6:00:00 PM
Yes! Heartiest congratulations for winning first place with this gem you wrote for my contest. I'm thrilled for you, William:-)
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William Kekaula
Date: 8/5/2020 6:37:00 PM
Thanks again, Edward, for your accolades, read and comment, Aloha! William
Date: 8/5/2020 5:07:00 PM
What a lovely piece William and so glad to see you in the top win!:) congrats my friend!:)
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William Kekaula
Date: 8/5/2020 5:17:00 PM
Thanks for your comment and accolades, Brenda, Aloha! William
Date: 8/5/2020 3:44:00 PM
Amazing Sijo and captivating sea tale, William. Congratulations on your #1 win ~ John
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William Kekaula
Date: 8/5/2020 5:15:00 PM
Thanks for your time to read my Sijo and commenting, John, and accolades, Aloha! William
Date: 8/4/2020 1:32:00 PM
Brilliant poem, William! Too bad my contest filled so quickly as I would've urged you to resubmit it as a "Free Verse." Still no.1 in my book! Faved.
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William Kekaula
Date: 8/4/2020 6:48:00 PM
Thanks for your generosity, Edward, presently, its future lies with Brian Strand, Aloha! William
Date: 8/2/2020 5:31:00 PM
You are kidding me, this is superb, briiliant, perfect! Gosh, this deserves accolades awarded to the harpoon holding seafarer. Excellent ending, stunningly set, described with pace, action, perception top notch.
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Sigrid Ermine
Date: 8/5/2020 11:04:00 PM
Ha! Pedantic! I am often tripped up by specification requirements. I notice a new contest today advises only to 'have fun' - surely this is where our best expression arises from. Well earned number One Win here, William.
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William Kekaula
Date: 8/2/2020 5:48:00 PM
Actually, this poem was meant for a contest, "Pick-A-Title, Vol 20 - Free Verse 3", wherein, Edward Ibeh concluded statement was "Any form", still, I overlook his earlier statement that he wanted "Free Form" instead, c'est la vie!
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William Kekaula
Date: 8/2/2020 5:42:00 PM
My thanks to your astute thoroughness, Sigrid, rarely are my poems read with integrity, thank you my friend, Aloha! William