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Monoku In Song

the first cut may not always be the deepest ~ but it's the bloodiest take a load off your fannie, Annie ~ but don't put your weight down on me stumbled over a chair and broke my leg ~ while dancing with my eyes closed put another dime in the jukebox, baby ~ or the music won't play keep knock, knock, knockin' on Heaven's door ~ most of us will not call it home

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Jeff Connelly

Date: 8/18/2023 8:32:00 AM

Love the Annie line Lin; from "The Weight" by The Band. But proper notice of Dylan. Very clever words written here. Thanks

Jeff Connelly
Date: 8/18/2023 8:50:00 AM

Good morning Lin. I'm looking for your least viewed poem so I can read it and comment lolol

Lin Lane
Date: 8/18/2023 8:43:00 AM

G'morning, Jeff. Consensus gives the nod to the Annie line. lol Thanks for the kudos.

Joseph May

Date: 7/25/2023 7:03:00 AM

Nice take on the songs Lin, best wishes

Lin Lane
Date: 7/25/2023 7:14:00 AM

Thanks, Joseph. It was a ‘just for fun’ write.

Jan Allison

Date: 7/24/2023 1:57:00 PM

these are such fun Lin lol, my (ex)sister is called Anne and she was fat, so I liked the annie one best lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 7/25/2023 7:13:00 AM

I can see why. ;-)

David Kavanagh

Date: 7/24/2023 10:44:00 AM

Where did these spring from Lin, humour with an underlying message methinks, I like the Annie one best lol, very clever, cheers David

Lin Lane
Date: 7/24/2023 11:07:00 AM

lol David. Thanks! I was listening to Rod Stewart sing 'First Cut' and I wrote that one. The others followed with each successive song until I told myself, "STOP IT!" Annie is the funniest.