Mirror

MIRROR so profane looking me over head to toe a counselor no - a judge i’m ashamed you shriek infinitesimal fragments fall to the floor quite mad i’m stuffed into this tiny dress no one can tell me i’m too fat but your teardrops whittle at my self-aggrandizement i cheat on my diet swallow each shard now you see my heart and i can’t hide from your eyes 66 words 5/23/2017 One of five-70 words or less contest Word choice = mirror 1st Place

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Sunlite Wanter

Date: 6/11/2017 9:53:00 AM

Priceless, Kim!!!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/11/2017 11:26:00 AM

Thank you, Sunlite!

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 5/28/2017 7:57:00 PM

Ouch. Congratulations. The metaphor of swallowing the shards and the double meaning, great. Well written. I enjoyed reading this. Kai

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/28/2017 9:16:00 PM

Thank you, Kai!

Probir Gupta

Date: 5/28/2017 7:11:00 AM

Right .... the honest mirror ... very well done ... and the deserving top win ... Congratulations ...

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/28/2017 9:17:00 PM

Thank you, Probir!

Sandra Haight

Date: 5/27/2017 6:34:00 PM

The monster mirror of reality, Kim. You captured those feelings so well! Congratulations on your First Place win. Hugs, Sandra

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/27/2017 8:27:00 PM

Thank you, Sandra!

Anisha Dutta

Date: 5/25/2017 11:23:00 PM

Big Congrats to win top. Hugs.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/26/2017 9:19:00 AM

Thank you, Anisha!

Carole Duet

Date: 5/24/2017 10:16:00 PM

This poem has an impact, Kim. I can sooo relate! GL in the contest!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/24/2017 10:36:00 PM

Thank you, Carole!

Carol B.

Date: 5/23/2017 11:24:00 AM

The mirror can be cruel at times. We must not give the mirror as much power as we do. Somehow what we see doesn't necessarily present a true reflection of what others see. Others see the beauty we sometimes ignore. I think the heart is the reflection that shines the brightest. Loved this write. :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/23/2017 11:33:00 AM

Thank you, Carol! So true. Nothing like an entire humn in living color.

Chris Green

Date: 5/23/2017 10:05:00 AM

This was very cool and quite sad feeling Kim. But, I'll bet she looks fabulous in that dress to everyone else...just not to herself.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/23/2017 10:25:00 AM

Thanks, Chris