Mirror

scattered silver shards
splinters of self
seven years spoiled

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(C) March 2017

break updestinyfateintrospectionhaiku

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Susan Ashley

November 21, 2017 at 9:37 PM

John, a beautifully expressed Haiku. I love the metaphor and your use of alliteration. Excellent and enjoyed!

John Michaels

November 25, 2017 at 9:13 AM

Thank you Susan - I normally write the traditional 5-7-5 Haiku, but occasionally I let myself go more contemporary!! This one is especially close to me, so thanks for the great comments. Regards, John.

Paul Callus

May 7, 2017 at 4:06 PM

A shattered mirror which could easily be a metaphor for a broken relationship that might last years or a lifetime! Regards // paul

John Michaels

May 7, 2017 at 4:31 PM

That's very astute, Paul! Hit the nail on the head... Thank you for your comments! Regards, John.

Andrea Dietrich

March 6, 2017 at 3:35 PM

I really like this. I think most people would be very dismayed to see a mirror break. Old superstitions die hard!

John Michaels

March 11, 2017 at 4:52 AM

I've never been particularly superstitious - touch wood! :) - but I know some people are. In this case, the shattered mirror is representative of something else that - once broken - can never be the same; even if you think you've managed to piece it all back together again, the cracks are still there :( Thanks for your continued support! The contemporary form seems to be treating me well!

Lenny Gazbowski

March 5, 2017 at 2:28 PM

Deep haiku, nicely executed.

John Michaels

March 6, 2017 at 3:02 PM

Much appreciated. Well done for spotting that there's more to this than just a broken mirror!!

Lisa Ricci

March 5, 2017 at 12:28 PM

Hello John. The voice and tone are true to the haiku format. You even managed to state your message with very few words as you wrote in less the seventeen syllables. May we all be aware of the broken glass. Well done.

John Michaels

March 5, 2017 at 12:56 PM

Thanks for your kind comments, Lisa. Most of my Haiku are the traditional 5/7/5 form, but I've been delving more into the contemporary style recently - of which "Mirror" is the latest.