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Mirage

for lost in the day and the sounds of the sun with hands in the air and feelings undone as life in the sands and the pouring of fear of love and of death, it fails with a cheer

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 9/22/2013 4:41:00 PM
this is very insightful and deep. Lots of thought and feeling. nice job
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Samuel Robinson
Date: 9/22/2013 7:32:00 PM
Thank You! It just came out one day...
Date: 9/12/2013 12:21:00 PM
- Proficient and deeply written, Samuel !!! ..... (the sun will always rise again) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Samuel Robinson
Date: 9/16/2013 7:38:00 AM
Thank you!
Date: 9/11/2013 5:14:00 PM
Awesome piece; I love your work, Samuel. I disagree with Mr. Thornton; I like that you began with "for"; it adds a little something special for me :)
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Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 9/12/2013 3:31:00 PM
I agree :)
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Samuel Robinson
Date: 9/11/2013 8:29:00 PM
It keeps the meter for the first and 3 lines balanced ;)
Date: 9/11/2013 8:35:00 AM
Good morning Samuel, somehow I feel as if the mirage was an okay natural view. Nice way of placing a displaced image of distant through your poem...Linda
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Samuel Robinson
Date: 9/11/2013 8:33:00 PM
It was a disconnected verse that I really liked, the title brought it together a described it just right!

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