Mirage

for lost in the day and the sounds of the sun
with hands in the air and feelings undone
as life in the sands and the pouring of fear
of love and of death, it fails with a cheer
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Davis Avatar
September 22, 2013 at 4:41 PM
this is very insightful and deep. Lots of thought and feeling. nice job
Robinson Avatar
September 22, 2013 at 7:32 PM
Thank You! It just came out one day...
Andresen Avatar
September 12, 2013 at 12:21 PM
- Proficient and deeply written, Samuel !!! ..... (the sun will always rise again) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Robinson Avatar
September 16, 2013 at 7:38 AM
Thank you!
That Archaic Poet Avatar
September 11, 2013 at 5:14 PM
Awesome piece; I love your work, Samuel. I disagree with Mr. Thornton; I like that you began with "for"; it adds a little something special for me :)
That Archaic Poet Avatar
September 12, 2013 at 3:31 PM
I agree :)
Robinson Avatar
September 11, 2013 at 8:29 PM
It keeps the meter for the first and 3 lines balanced ;)
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September 11, 2013 at 8:35 AM
Good morning Samuel, somehow I feel as if the mirage was an okay natural view. Nice way of placing a displaced image of distant through your poem...Linda
Robinson Avatar
September 11, 2013 at 8:33 PM
It was a disconnected verse that I really liked, the title brought it together a described it just right!
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