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Minimalist: Song of Despair

Hanging to his dwindling sanity he haphazardly weaves a net of confused and conflicting emotions. Weakened by pangs of futility the strained fine thread snaps... - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Contest: Minimalist Form (5 unrhymed lines each with 5 words) Sponsor: Nette Onclaud Placed 2nd © 14th October 2017

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Fj Thomas

Date: 12/14/2017 10:38:00 AM

Many of us pray our threads keep holding. Great poem.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/14/2017 10:54:00 AM

Thank you for reading and commenting. Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 12/5/2017 5:41:00 PM

Paul, a sad, desperate and sensitive portrayal of depression and/or mental illness. Your despairing imagery invokes a heartfelt response of empathy and compassion. Your last two lines are especially heartrending. Congratulations on your fine placement with your superb write. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 12/6/2017 4:39:00 AM

Thank you for the insightful comments, Susan. I was in close contact with a person who suffered from both depression & mental illness, so I can relate to what such people have to go through. ~ Warm regards // paul

John Fleming

Date: 11/12/2017 4:30:00 AM

Rather good this, Paul...I can imagine how a lot of unfortunate people have irretrievably slipped into that all encompassing net. My very best regards, Paul, as always. :) john

Paul Callus
Date: 11/13/2017 4:40:00 PM

Mental complications are hard to understand, John, and there are no easy solutions to such problems. Thank you for reading and commenting. Regards // paul

John Michaels

Date: 10/28/2017 5:36:00 AM

Perfectly encapsulated, Paul. Loved the metaphors in this one. Congrats on your High-Placed win. Regards, John.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/28/2017 1:32:00 PM

Many thanks, John. Glad you enjoyed it. Regards // paul

Agnes Krampe

Date: 10/25/2017 9:04:00 PM

Great take on the prompt, Paul - congrats on your win!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/27/2017 11:08:00 AM

Thank you, Agnes. Have a nice weekend. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/22/2017 8:50:00 PM

wow, I really like how you did yours, Paul. A BIG congrats on your well deserved win

Paul Callus
Date: 10/23/2017 11:10:00 AM

Glad you like it, Andrea....thank you! Regards // paul

Robert Lindley

Date: 10/22/2017 2:46:00 PM

SUCH DEPTH AND RAW TRUTH IN SO FEW STELLAR VERSES MY FRIEND. A FAV...

Paul Callus
Date: 10/22/2017 4:37:00 PM

Many thanks, my friend...a pleasure to have you stopping by. Regards // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 10/21/2017 6:02:00 PM

Dropping back to say many congrats on your win Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 10/22/2017 4:27:00 PM

Thank you, Jan. Pleased to have you beside me on the podium:) Hugs // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 10/21/2017 5:42:00 PM

Paul, congratulations on your win well done.. :) Hugs Eve ~`*

Paul Callus
Date: 10/22/2017 4:23:00 PM

Thank you once again, Eve....I am sure I replied to your comment yesterday, but there's no sign of it!! Hugs // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/21/2017 5:02:00 PM

total isolation well rendered by your dripping pen, paul... wishing you best congrats on your high-rated win with thanks for supporting this challenge...

Paul Callus
Date: 10/21/2017 5:15:00 PM

You are a herald of good news, Nette:) Thank you for having me on your winners' list, and for the lovely comments, but most of all for the inspiration. ~ Wishing you a lovely weekend. ~ Hugs // paul

Maria Williams

Date: 10/17/2017 1:19:00 AM

The strained fine thread snaps...What fine closure, in a few short lines you have described the anguish so well. Good luck in the contest, this is awesome and a fave...Maria

Paul Callus
Date: 10/17/2017 9:25:00 AM

Many thanks, Maria! Not all threads snap, but many do. Some people are in need of sincere help and understanding. Regards // paul