Tonye George Poet Rhyme

Minichu on Dilemma

A promised better days,
Now discombobulated balls of emotions 
Cold pain lays!

Stop new heartbeat,
Or make my wife's heart pump instead 
Hard seat!

A bridge,
Both hot chaos 
Ridge!

A promised better days,
Or make my wife's heart pump instead 
Ridge!

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Victor Buhagiar July 24, 2024 at 2:03 AM You did very well, Tonye. This is a complicated and difficult contest. Best for a win. Tonye George July 28, 2024 at 7:57 AM Thank you dear Victor. I appreciate.

Sara Kendrick July 18, 2024 at 2:33 AM Reads like a good contender for the contest to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing. Sara K Tonye George July 18, 2024 at 7:26 AM Thank you, Dear Sara. I appreciate.

I Am Anaya July 17, 2024 at 6:51 AM Great effort for a very challenging form, the rhyme scheme especially (b), (b), (b). Theme chosen keeps my interest, Tonye. Once I figured it out, I fell in love with Minichu's, like crypto puzzles, bol! Tonye George July 18, 2024 at 7:29 AM Thank you so much, Dear Anaya. I hope on challenging forms, once in a red moon.. haha.

Valsa George July 17, 2024 at 5:27 AM I find this form so challenging and so I have never attempted a Minichu. But you have done it with such ease and mastery. Great entry. All the Best, dear Tonye. Tonye George July 18, 2024 at 7:27 AM It was really challenging. But don't we like challenges sometimes? Haha. I just had to try dear V. Thank you for your support.

Andrea Dietrich July 16, 2024 at 4:14 PM This is a difficult limiting form. I appreciate your effort with it. Tonye George July 17, 2024 at 1:57 AM I really did try. Thank you Andrea.

Silent One July 15, 2024 at 2:32 PM Nicely done.. I cant say it is a form I like very much to be honest, but I can feel the theme in your words.. Nice rhymes and flow to it.. Best of luck in the contest.. Tonye George July 17, 2024 at 1:58 AM Thank you, Dear Silent. Never tried it before. It was fun having to do it.

Ink Empress July 15, 2024 at 4:22 AM Dear tonye, its nice to see you try this form minichu, and youv also used beautiful rhymes. I love the way youv depicted pain and how it lays as well as emotions! Pleasure reading this! Best wishes for the contest Tonye George July 17, 2024 at 1:59 AM Thank you Dear Ink. I just wanted to see what I could bring out with that form.

Nette Onclaud July 14, 2024 at 10:19 PM enjoyed the study of mild conflict using crisp, flowing language! Tonye George July 17, 2024 at 1:59 AM Yeàh! Thank you Nette.