Mine Chambermaid

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                As I sat
        comfortably in my
            soothing seat 
I am put to the test by the sound

    the slow creek of her walk
         down the wooden
                 steps

       As I try with all wit
       to pen on mine slip
        her walk closes in
        as her finger tips

     Yes how quick mine
                 Wit
           my pen and
                 slip
             vanished
          when her lips

      touched mine hips
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010


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Date: 11/4/2010 10:42:00 AM
James, you say just enough to paint the picture and what an magical one it is. Enjoyed this ;) love Wilma
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Date: 11/4/2010 6:10:00 AM
what a chambermaid! john
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Date: 11/4/2010 3:44:00 AM
Sexy poetry.
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Date: 11/3/2010 8:35:00 AM
This sure is a very cute and sweet write, James and I love how you worded this-- enjoyed reading this very lovely & witty poem :) -- nikko :)
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Date: 11/3/2010 6:36:00 AM
Ow it was worth the time not writing i guess :)Sweet poem,sweet!Celene
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Date: 11/3/2010 4:08:00 AM
Reads like her sound was a delight to your ear for you delighted to have her near.Alas, you wanted to continue to write but you got a great poem out of the situation."Had Times Been Different"..Yes, James, I loved this man who was my adoptive father..I love him because he chose me to be his child..He had reared his family and this time of his life could have been much easier but he chose to take me into his life .Taking on that parenting responsibility for another lifetime..Enjoyed your work..SK
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Date: 11/2/2010 9:22:00 PM
Methinks you could not be TOO repulsed by her sound!! Great ending on this one. LUv, andrea
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Date: 11/2/2010 4:42:00 PM
Kiss me quick, James! This is a steamy write that I really enjoyed. Hope you and Noah are doing well, dear friend. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 11/2/2010 10:09:00 AM
A sensual delight to read this afternoon, James...The visual is perfect in these few words, as always, enjoyable. Always, Audrey
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Date: 11/2/2010 9:30:00 AM
Hello James, My but you are witty this morning, I love this one, its a keeper.... Thank you for your kind words As Always, Shar
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Date: 11/2/2010 9:16:00 AM
Yummy James.. great play on words rolling one into the other.. sweet creativity this election day ..luv.. enjoyed James...
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