''Minced'' Words That Ramble

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I

I write-
words    quavering with emotion-
my words speak thickly
fragments of my life

minced   words   that ramble

and I lispandslur
I croak and hesitate
and mitigate
words

oh this world is so shattering-beautiful

my pen
fragments of minced
words    that ramble
and jumbledthoughts come tumbling

I have a message-to embody in words
it's
a phrase
   a thought
     and
           an
             utterance    whispering

a mamby-pamby     poem
minced
words
that ramble    breathe    rupture

II

tumbling words
          from a word picking girl
                                    of promise
mincedwords
goody-good-good

                  words that splinter the soul
with pain and sorrow
minced words
                     in verse and rhyme

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June 17, 2016

Poetry/Free Verse/"minced' words that ramble
Copyright Protected, ID 16-802-129-0
All Rights Reserved.  Written under Pseudonym.


For the contest, Minced Words
sponsor, John Lawless


Third Place

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Teddy Kimathi

Date: 6/29/2016 2:08:00 AM

I really enjoyed your verse, and the structure style of your verses... Congrats BW, for your top placement in the contest!! ;-)

Sara Chansarkar

Date: 6/27/2016 1:25:00 PM

This style is uncommon and very effective,congrats Broken!

Janice Canerdy

Date: 6/27/2016 8:58:00 AM

Fantastic, Constance! Congrats on your win. Janice

John Lawless

Date: 6/27/2016 8:35:00 AM

Well done Constance!!!(eat your heart out E.E.). The line breaks and spacing, the elision of the words for effect, all worked brilliantly. Thanks for participating in the contest.

Balveen Cheema

Date: 6/22/2016 10:00:00 PM

You couldn't have done better, Constance! Goid Luck!