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Midnight Molasses

nicotine stained fingers tap ashes into a shot glass half full of midnight molasses amber buzz in my bones watching from across the room she knows i got a jones she got a body i want to own lickin, my lips- lettin' her know i'm full grown just sittin' here tryin' to get my lie together i ain't gonna lie i want us to ride together lying so i can love her better and, yeah, so i can peel her out that sweater grab a napkin from the bar intent on writing her a letter expressing how i wish we were alone the first time that i met her order me another shot of that midnight molasses glance back across the room her and him are tapping glasses

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 4/29/2009 2:08:00 PM
This had me saying "Oh No!” and “What is she doing?” Nice twist, even if I was hoping for a happy ending. I especially love the picture painted at the beginning. Well done again. Kat x
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Date: 4/23/2009 5:25:00 AM
Loved the first few lines it kicked it up--well done well written
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Date: 4/19/2009 7:54:00 PM
i like that nice Brian
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Date: 4/19/2009 7:53:00 PM
May I just say it is her loss. love the flow and the desire through this one.
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Date: 4/19/2009 9:37:00 AM
Magnificent my friend! What a scene you set... a truly memorable piece. The images reach right out and grab ya!! Best wishes, Keith
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Date: 4/19/2009 7:46:00 AM
great writing filled with human desire, I enjoy the twist at the end, Brian, I agree, the strongest Men, are the ones I look up to as guides, can laugh at temptation, master it, and lead us on to greater things, with enormous character! and thanks for comments! Jim
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Date: 4/19/2009 6:32:00 AM
I like your style, Brian, your tell it like it is. I'm a big Charles Bukowski fan. How about you? Love daver
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Date: 4/19/2009 3:13:00 AM
nicely written,very nice indeed
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Date: 4/19/2009 1:35:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments. I really like this poem and your style of writing. It's the most unique style I have read in a long time. Nikhita.
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