Carolyn Devonshire Poet Free verse

Mental Hospital Bills

dadgum doctors, heads up their butts
poking, prodding, pricking skin
neurologist a psychopath
gets pleasure as electric volts pass through my body

family doctor showed little concern
made me paranoid about irregular heartbeat
EKG failed to determine cause
left me more in doubt than at ease

dentist like a character from Dustin Hoffman’s “Marathon Man”
the more pain inflicted
the more he rejoiced
deep root cleaning caused severe infection

bloodwork done by Vampira clones
labs filled with tubes and needles
results not shared with me
yet I footed the bill

optometrist an Oriental who moved so fast
didn’t care if the prescribed glasses worked
boo on you, dang aristocrats
waving your credentials

nurses so slow to respond
MRI promised on CD, but couldn’t be obtained
just like the blood tests, needed a “report”
doctors driving me insane

each should share my mental hospital bills


*Based on ongoing health tests and written for PD’s contest.  Assignment Free Verse, 25 lines, category slam, sad and educational, title: Mental Hospital Bills

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Black Eyed Susan July 12, 2011 at 5:55 PM Congrats on your win Carolyn! I appreciate your comments on my poem. i don't think I earned the placement, especially after reading your entry. It should have placed higher than mine. Mine was just fiction, while yours has a lot of truth in it. I suspect some personal experience inspired parts of this? I hope not. but if so, hugs.

Kabuteng P.Ink K. July 12, 2011 at 11:19 AM haha that last line sure finished this off so well, Carolyn! It's so carzy how medical bills can pile up! Congrats on your win and hugs

Carol Sunshine Brown July 12, 2011 at 5:06 AM Congratulations Carolyn on your win in the "Assignment" contest of P.D. Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta July 12, 2011 at 4:09 AM My congratulations on this win in the contest of p.d., Carolyn

Nette Onclaud July 12, 2011 at 12:52 AM carols, swinging cheers to you for the amazing award!! :) huggs

T.A. Skyles-Theoklapoet December 23, 2010 at 1:10 PM This was filled with admiration for a treasured friendship.Carolyn your friendship lights up my day.Thanks for the comment you sent.Me and my daughter start cooking today I do all the mixing she does stove stuff grandaughter is helper.Have a great Christmas hope you get everything you want.Merry Christmas Teresa

Audrey Haick June 30, 2010 at 8:51 PM Congratulations on your Honorable Mention, Carolyn! This is delightful to read and it's true that real friends are always there right when you need them. Love, Audrey

John Loving Iii June 30, 2010 at 1:52 PM WOW! this guy knows how to operate.

Carol Sunshine Brown June 27, 2010 at 10:55 AM Congratulations Carolyn on your win in Tirzah Conway's contest "Sweetheart". Love, Carol

Kabuteng P.Ink K. June 26, 2010 at 7:47 AM I really enjoyed that image, of love literally coming down--very touching story, Carolyn--so sweet of John!:) Congrats on your win :)--thank you btw for all your comments in my poems--and hmm as for that hotdog boy, I'm afraid he only exists in my imagination ;) but I did write a version of actually coming into contact with him--if you're curious to find out, it's the same title as that one--"20:10" --thanks again--hugs, nikko :)

Doris Culverhouse June 25, 2010 at 9:32 PM very sweet gesterure John, and thanks for sharing Carol!

Andrea Dietrich June 25, 2010 at 8:13 PM Carolyn, this was the perfect response to a contest of this nature. I really liked this one. LUv, Andrea

Joyce Johnson June 25, 2010 at 7:45 PM Congratulations Caroline on your win and also for having such a thoughtful friend. Love, Joyce

Tirzah Conway June 25, 2010 at 6:19 PM Wonderful Acrostic! Congrats on your H.M. in my contest!~Tirzah~

Krystel Andrew April 9, 2010 at 9:07 AM thanks for commenting on mine.. i am only an amateur.. your poem is really beautiful.. thanks again. love, krystel

Andrea Dietrich January 15, 2010 at 8:03 AM Very beautiful. This is the best one of yours that i have read yet! Did it win in a contest. This Love comes down, wasn't it a contest topic before i came here? Anyway, I appreciate your great reponse to me today. LUv, andrea

Billy Thekidster January 14, 2010 at 9:44 AM This is my 100th comment on Poetry Soup. Carolyn my dear, this honor goes to you. - A truly great tribute Carolyn. Best Wishes Always, Bill

Edward Orozco January 10, 2010 at 9:17 AM Beautiful poem! -edward

Caroline Cécile Delacroix January 6, 2010 at 10:34 PM Very nice tribute, Carolyn. A joy to read. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Love and happiness, Caroline.

Gerrit Verstraete January 5, 2010 at 10:23 AM Thank you Carolyn for your generous comment on my poem. Pardon me for not knowing how to send you a message direct and not have to add it as a comment to your poems ( no reflection on your poetry of course ). My poem is part of a 5 volume epic totaling 16,500 lines ( 89,342 words ). Took 6 years to complete. Not a popular genre these days but I did publish volume 1, "Cerulean Odyssey." www.wordclay.com Take good care - Gerrit

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 4, 2010 at 8:55 AM May u heal quickly and without too much pain... safe trip back to Florida also... I know this cold weather in N.J. must have taken its toll.. it has on me... may your new year be filled with blessings.. luv... creativeness... friendships... health... luv.. Linda-Marie

Robert Anderson January 2, 2010 at 6:21 AM I love the tone, it validates the quality as pure. I was immersed and dug it.

Cecil Hickman January 1, 2010 at 6:20 PM a simple but touching piece describing the friendship and love that was shared with you from a dear friend,wonderfully written with again friendship and love, Thank God for friends and loved ones,and I consider you a dear friend for sure,,Thank you for always reading my words and leaving a pice of your heart and mind behind,hope you had a wonderful visit,,Blessings..Cecil

Carrie Richards January 1, 2010 at 2:33 PM Thinking of you on this New Years Day, Carolyn, and hope the memory of your Dad isn't too painful....cherish the good memories, try not to think of the sad ones. Best Wishes, and a speedy recovery with that bad knee! ~ Love, Carrie

Doris Culverhouse December 31, 2009 at 4:23 PM wonderful indeed!! especially to John for remembering you at a hard time.

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