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Memory

As sleet beats the midnight morning, Through ice specks and fallen leaves' dust, With Winter's drought yet colored by A phantasm's war in my skies. Through ice specks and fallen leaves' dust, The memory frozen on conscious ways; A phantasm's war in my skies— I scope its child in between us. The memory frozen on conscious ways, With Winter's drought yet colored by; I scope its child in between us, As sleet beats the midnight morning.

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Date: 12/19/2023 11:20:00 AM
You do make pantoums seem so easy to write , youv done a flawless one that flows so well and i love your chosen refrains and also how youve written “ A phantasm's war in my skies— I scope its child in between us.” What a line so descriptive and soul stirring! I absolutely loved reading this! Sending you light always
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Date: 12/17/2023 2:47:00 PM
Nice penning Paige with such effects of memories. Have a nice day, Gordon
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Date: 12/17/2023 2:07:00 PM
Hello Paige Hind :-) Very nice poem about memories! Have a very nice day ~AA
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Date: 12/17/2023 7:35:00 AM
I found this poem to be quite moving. Excellent starting entice; instantly captivated and a delight to read.
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Date: 12/16/2023 8:00:00 PM
great opening hook - right up my alley, a pleasure to read
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Date: 12/16/2023 5:13:00 PM
I found this poem powerful...liked 'a phantasm's war in my skies...and memory frozen on conscious ways. I've not ever tried this form, but your I found yours outstanding. I may have to try this form...you inspired me...have a great evening, Sara
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Date: 12/16/2023 3:11:00 PM
You did the pantoum well...look forward to one with more stanzas
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Paige Hind
Date: 12/20/2023 5:54:00 PM
This is how I saw this form written before I tried it. Anyway, about medium is how far I get with my poetry, rarely really, really long...not to say, I don't enjoy long poetry. :)

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