Paige Hind Poet Rhyme

Memories Coming By Candlelight - Minichu

the candle's haul  — 
blown from my lips on glass,
shearing fire falls

how the wick goes down,
left a shadow on smiling girl's cheeks from the frame,
picture played out now

stained
days
stay

the candle's haul — 
left a shadow on smiling girl's cheeks from the frame,
stay

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Andrea Dietrich May 4, 2026 at 12:29 AM Did you ever get a win here? I think I have read and commented to all your poems. I could have sworn you had more than one page though. Am I wrong about that?

Victor Buhagiar March 15, 2026 at 11:37 PM Stunning poem. You deserve a high placement.

Andrea Dietrich March 11, 2026 at 11:54 PM I find this form very difficult to do with exact rhymes. Your near rhymes are nice. Wonder if I will still have time to try this one

Paula Goldsmith March 11, 2026 at 12:19 PM What a wonderful write you have here. Great Ending... Have a lovely day writing away............

I Am Anaya March 11, 2026 at 10:44 AM This really takes me away, Paige. It flows & licks the page! Sending you lambency~ like your take on minichu.

Kim Rodrigues March 10, 2026 at 6:05 AM Especially love these two lines: how the wick goes down, left a shadow on smiling girl's cheeks from the frame…also, blown from my lips on glass… my perception is of cutting glass, a smile fading… much more descriptive then a smile to frown. Well done, dear Paige!

Valsa George March 9, 2026 at 9:12 PM Wonderful Minichu. You have done it Paige. All the best dear friend!

Abdullah Alhemaidy March 9, 2026 at 1:01 PM Very nice and well enjoyed read! Have a nice day lovely Paige!

Nette Onclaud March 9, 2026 at 7:40 AM ohh, your kind of nostalgia rules, paige...love this!

Ghairo Daniels March 9, 2026 at 12:15 AM Missed reading you, Paige. Lovely imagery of candle and fire. How deeply you have loved. !! If you are perhaps submitting this one to the Minichu Contest, the first long line (12 syllables) need to be in stanza one. I think I remember this correctly. So double check. If not for contest, it is perfect. Xxx. Paige Hind March 9, 2026 at 12:32 AM I didn't even know there was a contest for Minichus, thanks. I didn't plan on entering it - and I like the flow of it now. I am I guess eccentric, maybe should check and see what's out there more often. I just don't want to change the first line because I think it may read differently... <3 Love.