Memorial

he passed away without a sound… after all these years we still listen to the silence of his departure ----------------------------- [ded. to my elder brother] Judged 12/13/2019 ~ NA Memorial of a Loved One Poetry Contest Sponsored by Chantelle Anne Cooke Contest N-A Rerun 4 by John Hamilton

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Angela Crabtree

Date: 11/17/2020 1:37:00 PM

It's something that always lives with us. Great poem, Paul :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/19/2020 6:07:00 AM

Thank you, Angela. Have a lovely day. Regards // paul

Md Johnson

Date: 12/25/2019 9:39:00 AM

I too, hear the echo of that sound. Excellent write.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/27/2019 2:36:00 PM

Thank you, MD. Excuse the late reply, but I have been unwell for the past 8 days; now on the road to recovery. Regards// paul

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 12/16/2019 11:36:00 PM

Crikey Paul … these lines are so good - Merry Christmas Paul - Lindsay

Paul Callus
Date: 12/17/2019 2:04:00 PM

Pleased you liked them Lindsay...thank you. Merry Christmas to you too. // paul

Heidi Sands

Date: 12/16/2019 10:39:00 AM

So well written Paul! Take care. Merry Christmas :)

Paul Callus
Date: 12/16/2019 12:53:00 PM

So pleased that you like it, Heidi...thank you. Happy Christmas to you, too! // paul

Quoth Theraven

Date: 12/15/2019 9:51:00 PM

Paul, Sadness learned in profound fashioned write in this poem 'Memorial'. And all the comments are deeply heartfelt. -Richard

Paul Callus
Date: 12/16/2019 12:52:00 PM

Thank you for reading and commenting, Richard. Best regards // paul

Anil Deo

Date: 12/14/2019 10:39:00 AM

Silences are eloquent. (Thanks for visitng my work: "Next to each other, towns of Queensburgh & Escombe (after Harry Escombe) in South Africa. The names hold memories of my first 6-7 years of life & schooling. The separation. Now we are reuniting ... if Jesus is center, we will succeed. We inhabit a secular-slanted world, Pray for S. Africa ... Merry Christmas friend)

Paul Callus
Date: 12/14/2019 3:24:00 PM

Thank you, Anil. After separation a reunion is the utmost one can hope for! May your country prosper in peace and love, my friend. A Merry & Blessed Christmas to you, too! // paul

Panagiota Romios

Date: 12/12/2019 7:47:00 PM

Just beautiful, Paul best wishes to you. Panagiota xxx Condolences for your loss,

Paul Callus
Date: 12/13/2019 2:27:00 PM

Thank you on all counts, Panagiota. Have a lovely weekend. Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/12/2019 12:06:00 AM

They stay close to our heart. Sorry for your loss Paul. Congratulations on your Lifetime Membership at Soup! Happy holidays! : ) xxoo

Paul Callus
Date: 12/12/2019 1:20:00 PM

Thank you so much, Connie. Time heals, but we never forget. Happy Holidays to you too :) Warm regards // paul

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 12/11/2019 11:13:00 AM

Peace to your brother's soul and contentment to your mother's heart, and to you Paul for such a great loss.. I have just reread your dedication.. and felt the pain of a silent death .. May God bless all of you and protect your loved ones.. Best regards.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/11/2019 2:17:00 PM

It was very kind of you to re-read my poem and to come back with such comforting words, Besma. Your friendship and support are sincerely cherished. ~ Warm regards // paul

Aqua Marine

Date: 12/11/2019 9:53:00 AM

A touching memorial poem, Paul - and thankfully your brother passed away in such a gentle manner. Love this- so simple stated, yet says so much. (((Warm Hugs))) ~~AquaM~~

Paul Callus
Date: 12/11/2019 10:31:00 AM

Thank you, Aqua. My mother could never understand how he just left, without even a sound...a whisper :( Warm regards // paul

Rhoda Tripp

Date: 12/10/2019 10:51:00 PM

Very beautiful dedication.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/11/2019 10:14:00 AM

Thank you so much, Rhoda. Have just been reading your "Goodnight" poem; I notice that many have stopped by to read it. Warm regards // paul

Line Gauthier

Date: 12/9/2019 2:50:00 PM

Very touching, Paul. Love your tribute.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/11/2019 10:10:00 AM

Pleased you enjoyed it, Line...thank you. Regards // paul

Ilene Bauer

Date: 12/9/2019 2:12:00 PM

This is wonderful, Paul! So beautifully said...

Paul Callus
Date: 12/11/2019 10:09:00 AM

Thank you, Ilene. Always a pleasure to have you stopping by. Regards // paul

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 12/9/2019 11:27:00 AM

So expressive and painful.. genuine is your capture to the silence of death.. and we "keep listening" to that torturing silence of "the departure" of our loved ones.. An amazing entry of pure feel.. a great delight to read your poetry, Paul. Best regards and blessings.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/11/2019 10:08:00 AM

Thank you Besma; as always, your insightful feedback is much appreciated. ~ Warm regards & Blessings // paul

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 12/9/2019 10:51:00 AM

The last line is beautiful, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/9/2019 4:43:00 PM

Thank you, Caren. Goodnight..It's getting late over here! Regards // paul