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Written for the contest "Memento on the Moon" Sponsored by Suzette Richards...

I blow smoke of dreams to daffodil streams, beneath the sky, engrossed in love’s last sigh, while this heart quivers, drunk on astral fever, in the kohl-lined arms of the cold midnight, kissing my soul in silver slivers… O velveteen warrior, allow my gaze to trace lifelines~ sailing interstellar seas of electric stars wrapped in whimsical wisps, to leave our closing phrase on the lips of moon-haze, as I breathe the silk of Luna’s wistful breeze~ drawn from the rosy dusk of his restless repose... And this pearl ~ the nebulous clarity ~ emblazoned in pixelated poetry, shall be the timeless spark of twin flames, amidst the pull of bruised-blue silence…

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Di11y Da11y

Date: 4/24/2025 4:44:00 AM

Congratulations Ink! Beautiful poetry - I love the image of blowing petals to the moon :)

Suzette Richards

Date: 4/23/2025 3:44:00 AM

A beautifully crafted poem with memorable lines such as ‘to leave our closing phrase on the lips of moon-haze'. Your evocative lines shine, especially in the final stanza. Thank you for your support in this contest where I called for a Notional Ekphrasis, Ink.

Suzette Richards
Date: 4/23/2025 4:22:00 AM

When we give the power over to the pen (turning our mind off) is when magic happens.

Ink Empress
Date: 4/23/2025 3:54:00 AM

Thank you so much for my placement and your detailed comment dear suzette, i had in mind blowing petals to the moon and with verses of love written, hoping it would reach, hah, that was my mental artwork i think i drew as i wrote this, i really appreciate the inspiration: i didnt plan on writing it just happened.. sending you light always!

Zyrool Gifford

Date: 4/22/2025 4:20:00 AM

Hello Ink, this is truly an amazingly beautiful write and a pleasurable read. Good luck with the contest my friend.

Ink Empress
Date: 4/23/2025 3:55:00 AM

Thank you kind soul always

Hiba Junaid

Date: 4/22/2025 3:03:00 AM

"drunk on astral fever," "pixelated poetry," "bruised-blue silence" Just terrific word combos that are beautifully original, and I have to agree with Reya on this one - absolutely dreamy! A wonderful poem born from a lovely mind. Be Blessed always, Hiba <3

Hiba Junaid
Date: 4/22/2025 3:14:00 AM

Your poem is worthy of all the accolades, Ink!

Ink Empress
Date: 4/22/2025 3:06:00 AM

Its a pleasure hearing from you dear hiba! So kind of you! Thank you so much for your beautiful comment that really did lift me up! Im grateful truly

Reya Suri

Date: 4/21/2025 10:32:00 PM

Wow!!! how dreamy. your imagery and the way you describe the universe through wording choice tickles my brain; love this so much! Have a great day, poet! (P.S. hope your son did well on his exams :D )

Ink Empress
Date: 4/22/2025 3:07:00 AM

Awn how sweet of you to comment and also ask about my sons exams, its still ongoing and i hope it all turns out well for you and my son too. Thank you sweet soul always haha tickles your brain always makes me smile

Maria Williams

Date: 4/21/2025 10:15:00 PM

Dearest Inky.Wow, this is absolutely dreamy and soul-stirring! Your imagery flows like a cosmic lullaby—soft, deep, and full of emotion. I felt like I was drifting through galaxies made of silk and stardust. The “silver slivers,” “velveteen warrior,” and “bruised-blue silence” are especially magical lines. You have such a beautiful way of blending the celestial with the deeply personal. Loved every word!...Hugs

Paige Hind

Date: 4/21/2025 8:06:00 PM

Wow. This is going into my favs, as well. B r e a t h t a k i n g. "in the kohl-lined arms of the cold midnight, kissing my soul in silver slivers…" what a magnificent piece of art, Ink!!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/21/2025 3:32:00 PM

Wow. You nailed this. I don't dare even try. Every line lovely and meaningful. Brevity becomes you. A fave.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/21/2025 1:30:00 PM

- High-quality fine poem art... beautifully written, Ink :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs

Sotto Poet

Date: 4/21/2025 12:57:00 PM

Wow, such a magnificent poem explores love, desire, and cosmic connection using imagery from dreams, nature, and the universe, dearest Ink. It evokes strong emotions and shows love as magnificent and ephemeral, leaving a longing for connection. The topic explores the metaphysical dynamic of sentiments and the vastness of the cosmos, suggesting love transcends time and space. The descriptive language uses vivid images and analogies. Phrases like "smoke of dreams" and "velveteen warrior" immerse the reader in passion. Alliteration ("whimsical wisps") and assonance make the poetry melodic and lyrical. Personification is also evident in "kissing my soul" and "Luna's wistful breeze," which humanize natural events and increase emotion. The juxtaposition of heavenly and earthly imagery emphasizes love and the universe. To my fave. Warm hugs

Justin Bordner

Date: 4/21/2025 12:33:00 PM

Lifelines of love speak deeply on the skin of our rose petal feelings that find fire in the moonlight of innocent curiosity..."to leave our closing phrase on the lips of moon haze..." This poem is very pretty with calm awareness that love is serving it's timeless purpose Poetess. There's a wonderful melody to this write as well...J.A.B.

Lioness Onpaper

Date: 4/21/2025 11:18:00 AM

Oooo that opening line !!! blow smoke of dreams to daffodil streams, the absolute grace!!! allow my gaze to trace lifelines~ sailing interstellar seas of electric stars I love it whn u bring the ethereal element in .. to leave our closing phrase on the lips of moon-haze, mmmm love the dreamy vibe!! Ooo that ending is brilliant.. pull of bruised-blue silence… this piece is an absolute dream papi!!

Di11y Da11y

Date: 4/21/2025 10:08:00 AM

I love the internal rhymes creating a tangling sensation which leads into the pull of the traced lifelines. Rosy dusk and repose wrap so beautifully together. Gorgeous, good luck with the contest x

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 4/21/2025 9:31:00 AM

Your poetic masterpiece is interlaced with beautifully vivid pictures of longing, special wonder. It's rich with metaphor, imagery, and emotion, plus great reflection and admiration.

Lin Lane

Date: 4/21/2025 7:22:00 AM

That's the only kind of memento that should be left on the moon... phrases of her beauty from our lips to her.

Ink Empress
Date: 4/21/2025 7:52:00 AM

Ah thank you so much dear linnersz, i have a timeless connection with the moon and this prompt really inspired me. I appreciate always your kind and sincere comments truly. Sending you light

Billie Jama

Date: 4/21/2025 6:56:00 AM

This is absolutely breathtaking. "Kissing my soul in silver slivers" & "drawn from the rosy dusk of his restless repose" gave me the feels. The entire piece glows with ethereal beauty—like stardust in verse. You paint emotion in cosmic hues. Fav of mine x

Ink Empress
Date: 4/21/2025 7:02:00 AM

Thank you sis! You are so kind, im always grateful for your comments, they are so sincere and so uplifting! Sending you light always