Memento on the Moon

Hey this is like around third place on best new poems list. I like to think I helped put it there! Congrats, Ink

A beautifully crafted poem with memorable lines such as ‘to leave our closing phrase on the lips of moon-haze'. Your evocative lines shine, especially in the final stanza. Thank you for your support in this contest where I called for a Notional Ekphrasis, Ink.

Hello Ink, this is truly an amazingly beautiful write and a pleasurable read. Good luck with the contest my friend.

"drunk on astral fever," "pixelated poetry," "bruised-blue silence" Just terrific word combos that are beautifully original, and I have to agree with Reya on this one - absolutely dreamy! A wonderful poem born from a lovely mind. Be Blessed always, Hiba <3

Wow!!! how dreamy. your imagery and the way you describe the universe through wording choice tickles my brain; love this so much! Have a great day, poet! (P.S. hope your son did well on his exams :D )

Dearest Inky.Wow, this is absolutely dreamy and soul-stirring! Your imagery flows like a cosmic lullaby—soft, deep, and full of emotion. I felt like I was drifting through galaxies made of silk and stardust. The “silver slivers,” “velveteen warrior,” and “bruised-blue silence” are especially magical lines. You have such a beautiful way of blending the celestial with the deeply personal. Loved every word!...Hugs

Wow. This is going into my favs, as well. B r e a t h t a k i n g. "in the kohl-lined arms of the cold midnight, kissing my soul in silver slivers…" what a magnificent piece of art, Ink!!!

Wow. You nailed this. I don't dare even try. Every line lovely and meaningful. Brevity becomes you. A fave.

- High-quality fine poem art... beautifully written, Ink :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs

Wow, such a magnificent poem explores love, desire, and cosmic connection using imagery from dreams, nature, and the universe, dearest Ink. It evokes strong emotions and shows love as magnificent and ephemeral, leaving a longing for connection. The topic explores the metaphysical dynamic of sentiments and the vastness of the cosmos, suggesting love transcends time and space. The descriptive language uses vivid images and analogies. Phrases like "smoke of dreams" and "velveteen warrior" immerse the reader in passion. Alliteration ("whimsical wisps") and assonance make the poetry melodic and lyrical. Personification is also evident in "kissing my soul" and "Luna's wistful breeze," which humanize natural events and increase emotion. The juxtaposition of heavenly and earthly imagery emphasizes love and the universe. To my fave. Warm hugs

Lifelines of love speak deeply on the skin of our rose petal feelings that find fire in the moonlight of innocent curiosity..."to leave our closing phrase on the lips of moon haze..." This poem is very pretty with calm awareness that love is serving it's timeless purpose Poetess. There's a wonderful melody to this write as well...J.A.B.

Oooo that opening line !!! blow smoke of dreams to daffodil streams, the absolute grace!!! allow my gaze to trace lifelines~ sailing interstellar seas of electric stars I love it whn u bring the ethereal element in .. to leave our closing phrase on the lips of moon-haze, mmmm love the dreamy vibe!! Ooo that ending is brilliant.. pull of bruised-blue silence… this piece is an absolute dream papi!!

Your poetic masterpiece is interlaced with beautifully vivid pictures of longing, special wonder. It's rich with metaphor, imagery, and emotion, plus great reflection and admiration.

That's the only kind of memento that should be left on the moon... phrases of her beauty from our lips to her.

This is absolutely breathtaking. "Kissing my soul in silver slivers" & "drawn from the rosy dusk of his restless repose" gave me the feels. The entire piece glows with ethereal beauty—like stardust in verse. You paint emotion in cosmic hues. Fav of mine x