Meltdown

Meltdown As I awoke nightmares flew from my head Hugging my knees under covers they found me Acquainted pain reminds me all I've ever said I went and told all my good thoughts to flee I’m melting down so salvage the best of me Ghostly thoughts flicker from out of their heads So I hide my crazed eyes, glued to my feet Terrible pain from the words they've never said Gasping in silence, my own special treat My heart has finally lost its steady beat Wide-eyed trapped behind my rusting cage Screaming for help that won’t come to me With all that’s happened it’s time to turn the page A fitting end, my twisted smile mirrors with glee I’m melting down so salvage the best of me

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Shaz Cheesman

Date: 7/20/2013 12:52:00 AM

'Melting down...salvage the best of me' really loved that....thank you for sharing your poem and Welcome to PS.....Shaz

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/9/2013 3:18:00 AM

- Hi Tom, a well written poem. - Welcome to P-Soup. - Thanks for your first poem, hope there will be many more in the future. - Have fun with poetry. - Good luck! - Greetings from Norway / / Anne-Lise :)

Pace Ink-U-Script

Date: 7/1/2013 7:41:00 AM

I truly enjoyed reading this poem..post more!!!!

Skat A

Date: 6/29/2013 4:04:00 PM

Tom, not bad, your first poem on the soup is excellent for the readers. Stopping by with a nice and sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. Hope you meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop by and say hello. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND"....... God Bless........... Hugs* SKAT

Jessica Renee Dawson

Date: 6/29/2013 2:22:00 PM

An interesting read using fluid language!

Kim Van Breda

Date: 6/29/2013 6:06:00 AM

Excellent portrayal of a "meltdown"-- so often experienced-- yet rarely revealed. Hope this is for the contest .. if so , good luck-- you have a good chance of winning.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/28/2013 6:59:00 PM

i hope you post more poems, I wish to come back and read your poetry again... LINDA

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/28/2013 6:58:00 PM

Tom, wow... I like the ending line. i'm melting down, salvage... pretty, good for the taking... your poem incredible for a first poem. ... enjoyed dropping by :-) -WELCOME to poetry soup. I’m here to invite you on over to my latest contest. You will find the contest page on the top left hand side. Hopefully you find this place to be the comfort zone your pen is looking for. If you ever need or seek feedback on a certain poem, click on my name any time you like. I’m looking forward in following and reading your poetry. Hope to hear from you soon. You will enjoy the community, we are one big happy family. (Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Take Care!! From: your new poet friend Linda

Grace Cyrus

Date: 6/28/2013 1:17:00 PM

I can feel your sadness and writing brings about great release. Have faith and keep writing.