Beata Agustin Poet Personification

Melancholy's Revelation

I have enclosed you with gloom
inside the womb, babe's safe haven
attacking your fortress as your Mom 
writhed in agony drowning you 
against rejection fluid…

Then I welcomed you with hopelessness
watched your struggles to yell
miraculous survival shout
yet skeptic about your Mom’s deafening wails
accepting her loss over your birth…

Finally, I sealed you around 
grievous abandonment-asylum
since your Mom signed freedom waiver 
liberating you both from each other
toward partnership-severance…

But, now… I accept my failure
seeing you thriving in love
as God verily champions
grace and compassion*
with your orphanage family.

*Lamentations 3:22 It is of the LORD's mercies that we are not consumed, because his compassions fail not.

May 13, 2023
10th place, "Anatomy of Melancholy" Poetry Writing Contest
Sponsored by Craig Cornish; judged on 5/14/2023.

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Charlotte Puddifoot May 17, 2023 at 5:18 AM this is a different take on the theme, with some good internal rhyme and word combinations, leaving the reader thoughtful..congrats on your win in the contest!

Sam Kauffman May 15, 2023 at 11:15 AM Beata, congratulations on your win. Your word choice is so dynamic and definitely in the spirit of Lamentations and in the spirit of the Psalms of Lament where every one of them, except one, ends with a beautiful prayer of confidence. Truly "God champions grace and compassion." Perfect ending. Blessings my friend.

Kim Rodrigues May 15, 2023 at 6:32 AM Great personification! Uniquely yours! Congratulations, Beata!

Christuraj Alex May 14, 2023 at 8:05 PM "I accept my failure seeing you thriving in love as God verily champions grace and compassion" - beautifully written. Congratulations!

Triny Xiang May 13, 2023 at 7:59 AM If I read this from your viewpoint, it's a heartbreaking tale of motherhood. I'm constantly reminded children are not ours but sparrows to release however they may fall or rise. Walking in compassion as Christ did is a lifetime of fumbling and tumbling. I see that you have a head start. Bravo.