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Melancholy Moments

"And so being young and dipped in folly, I fell in love with melancholy..." -Edgar Allan Poe Despondent and dismal I’ve gone extinct, goodbye to hope, sadness has become grace. MELANCHOLY MOMENTS, I take a drink cuz’ I can’t forget the look on your face... as you held me during our last embrace- I lay in woe and drown in addiction, but no drug can take away affliction. Morose and disappointed I must cry, sorrow has become my best constriction- MELANCHOLY MOMENTS, I hope to die. Dizain: Ten lines of 10 syllables each line Rhyme Scheme: A-B-A-B-B-C-C-D-C-D Fictional Write Melancholy Contest Sponsor: Nayda Ivette Negron Date Written: September 25, 2016

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Sandra Haight

Date: 9/28/2016 3:24:00 PM

Back again, Laura, to congratulate you on your First Place win! Hugs, Sandra

Lu Loo
Date: 9/28/2016 4:35:00 PM

thank you Sandra :)-luloo

Joanna Daniel

Date: 9/28/2016 3:18:00 AM

A very sad fictional write, Laura, which sadly reflects many of the lives around:( Congratulations on your top win:)

Lu Loo
Date: 9/28/2016 6:17:00 AM

thank you lovely Jo :)-luloo

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/27/2016 9:09:00 PM

Congratulations, Luloo! Your writes always lovely even in sadness.

Lu Loo
Date: 9/28/2016 6:17:00 AM

thank you sweet Kim :)-luloo

Eve Roper

Date: 9/27/2016 6:24:00 PM

WhooHoo.. congratulations on your win ... Hugs :)

Lu Loo
Date: 9/28/2016 6:16:00 AM

thank you sweet Eve :)-luloo

Janis Thompson

Date: 9/27/2016 3:23:00 PM

Congratulations on first place win. Sad but beautiful.

Lu Loo
Date: 9/28/2016 6:16:00 AM

thank you Janis :)-luloo

Augustus Black

Date: 9/27/2016 11:46:00 AM

Congratulation for first place. All the best.

Lu Loo
Date: 9/27/2016 2:33:00 PM

thank you Augustus :)-luloo

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/27/2016 10:03:00 AM

Well done, Laura, and the layout accentuates the theme of the poem as well. I'm glad this is fiction and not your true feelings. Hugs to You !!

Lu Loo
Date: 9/27/2016 11:20:00 AM

thank you sweet Carrie! :)-luloo

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores

Date: 9/27/2016 9:47:00 AM

Congratulations Laura on the placement of the contest

Lu Loo
Date: 9/27/2016 11:20:00 AM

oh many thanks Nayda:) I am so grateful you enjoyed it :) I love your contests :)-luloo

Caycay Jennings

Date: 9/25/2016 8:16:00 PM

Oh, blow me away as dust taken by wind - I know the feeling. Thank goodness such gray has not been mine in quite a while and I have not scheduled any for the future. HA - like I'm in charge. Good lines of fierce, pain expression seeking escape and release ... CayCay

Lu Loo
Date: 9/26/2016 10:46:00 AM

thank you CayCay-you are so sweet- hope you are doing well! :)-luloo

Sandra Haight

Date: 9/25/2016 6:51:00 PM

So deep and sorrowful, Laura...you captured 'melancholy' so well. Best wishes for the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Lu Loo
Date: 9/26/2016 10:45:00 AM

thank you sweet Sandra :)-luloo