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Melancholy

A haunting from my past came back to see me that caused a misunderstanding between you and me I cant believe this, I caused it to end, before it began, with you as a future friend

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Robert Pettit

Date: 1/30/2012 11:00:00 PM

Hello Maxeen, and welcome to this site. You have a nice write here that needs one small correction: In your third line, it would be a good idea to change "begin" to "began". All of your other verbs are in past tense, so it would be a good idea to make them all the same. This writing is better than any of Sylvia's.

Maxeen Dennis
Date: 1/30/2012 11:50:00 PM

Thank you so much!

Date: 1/30/2012 12:50:00 AM

Umm how do I hate this let me count the ways.

Bryanna Watson

Date: 1/30/2012 12:44:00 AM

This is why I love poetry .. Good work :)

Maxeen Dennis
Date: 1/30/2012 1:01:00 AM

Thank you, for your encouragement Bry!