Maze

Maze
 
Oh my Heart, why do you seek
the ecstasy of Eden's garden
when love is a daunting puzzle.
Woe is you, you fool;
for you dare to travail
through its sinuous paths
filled with deception and treachery 
... ruled by a sweet-talking, sensuous
serpent, sinfully seductive 
with his cajoling, forked tongue,
promising every heavenly delight.

Greedily gulping wine-filled songs, 
frenetically feeding on empty poetry,
you’re blindfolded and lost 
on a dead-end street, 
bumping against a wall
of steel gray misery,
imprisoning your soul and 
turning your hopes and dreams
into doubt, desperation, and despair.
Oh my Heart, you’re trapped,
suspended in a twisting maze...
of unrequited, lethal love.

Contest:     Maze - 10 Word Challenge Poetry Contest
Sponsor:    Dear Heart
Date:         06-23-2020
Placement:  4th
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020

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Maverick Avatar
January 18, 2021 at 11:37 AM
Well done here Pandita, an am-gazing tale of twist and hopeless desire, strain and imagined Delights unattained 'good to see a win with it' All the best Joe'
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February 23, 2021 at 11:28 PM
Hi Joe, thank you so much for your kind words which I greatly appreciate! Best wishes, Pandita,
Raven Avatar
August 4, 2020 at 6:36 AM
Hi Pandita, firstly let me send my belated congratulations on your win in the contest with this excellently written poem of unrequited love. Your creativity reaches new heights with this beautiful write. It is funny how beauty can come out of sadness. Your wonderful words paint such vivid images in the mind. I love the content of this piece. Have a wonderful Tuesday. Love and Hugs....Mike. XX. Has too be a fave.
Sietesantos Avatar
August 4, 2020 at 8:10 AM
Dear Mike, it's great to hear from you and I hope you're doing well in these challenging times.Thank you for your compliments and support which I very much appreciate! Enjoy a beautiful day! Hugs. Pandita
Watt Avatar
July 1, 2020 at 8:46 PM
Back with a quick visit to say congratulations on your win, my friend! ~ John
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August 4, 2020 at 8:08 AM
Hi John, thank you so much for your lovely congratulations! Have a wonderful day, my friend! Best regards. Pandita
La France Avatar
July 1, 2020 at 3:43 PM
Pandita, congratulations on your win in my maze contest _Constance
Sietesantos Avatar
July 1, 2020 at 4:05 PM
Hi Constance, thank you so much for placing this piece on your list of winners! Kindest regards. Pandita
Mishra Avatar
July 1, 2020 at 2:46 PM
What a gripping tale of unrequited love Pandita! Love the way your muse has layers of emotions in the maze of trapped heart in love. Congratulations on your win! Blessings and love :)
Sietesantos Avatar
July 1, 2020 at 3:54 PM
Hi Aditi, thank you for visiting and leaving your lovely complimentary words! Hugs. Pandita
Somadas Avatar
July 1, 2020 at 12:58 AM
you’re trapped, suspended in a twisting maze...of unrequited, lethal love... lovely alliteration and flow Pandita.. Congrats..
Sietesantos Avatar
July 1, 2020 at 3:49 PM
Jenish, thank you so very much for your lovely complimentary words that I so appreciate! Hugs. Pandita
Watt Avatar
June 26, 2020 at 4:54 PM
Pandita, I loved all the alliterative words of "sensuous serpent, sinfully seductive" that start with "S" like a snake! You have really captured well the powerful allure of temptation with this paraphrase of the Garden of Eden story, and perfectly included all the 10 required words. Very powerful poetry. Best wishes to you in the contest ~ John
Sietesantos Avatar
July 1, 2020 at 3:42 PM
Hi John, I thank you for your wonderful, complimentary words that I really appreciate! Best regards. Pandita
Allison Avatar
June 23, 2020 at 1:22 PM
wow you certainly a-mazed me with the way you wove the words into a wonderful story, good luck in the contest, hope you are keeping well Pandita:-) hugs Jan xx
Sietesantos Avatar
June 23, 2020 at 3:48 PM
Thank you so much Jan - what a lovely compliment! I am so happy to hear from you and wish you and your loved ones all the best! Hugs. Pandita
Cunningham Avatar
June 23, 2020 at 1:12 PM
Brilliant verse using all ten allocated words Pandita. Hope you're well Good luck in the contest Tom
Sietesantos Avatar
June 23, 2020 at 3:42 PM
Dear Tom, I appreciate receiving your high compliments and wishes - thank you very much, my friend! Best regards always. Pandita
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