Maze

Maze
 
Oh my Heart, why do you seek
the ecstasy of Eden's garden
when love is a daunting puzzle.
Woe is you, you fool;
for you dare to travail
through its sinuous paths
filled with deception and treachery 
... ruled by a sweet-talking, sensuous
serpent, sinfully seductive 
with his cajoling, forked tongue,
promising every heavenly delight.

Greedily gulping wine-filled songs, 
frenetically feeding on empty poetry,
you’re blindfolded and lost 
on a dead-end street, 
bumping against a wall
of steel gray misery,
imprisoning your soul and 
turning your hopes and dreams
into doubt, desperation, and despair.
Oh my Heart, you’re trapped,
suspended in a twisting maze...
of unrequited, lethal love.

Contest:     Maze - 10 Word Challenge Poetry Contest
Sponsor:    Dear Heart
Date:         06-23-2020
Placement:  4th

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020



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Date: 1/18/2021 11:37:00 AM
Well done here Pandita, an am-gazing tale of twist and hopeless desire, strain and imagined Delights unattained 'good to see a win with it' All the best Joe'
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 2/23/2021 11:28:00 PM
Hi Joe, thank you so much for your kind words which I greatly appreciate! Best wishes, Pandita,
Date: 8/4/2020 6:36:00 AM
Hi Pandita, firstly let me send my belated congratulations on your win in the contest with this excellently written poem of unrequited love. Your creativity reaches new heights with this beautiful write. It is funny how beauty can come out of sadness. Your wonderful words paint such vivid images in the mind. I love the content of this piece. Have a wonderful Tuesday. Love and Hugs....Mike. XX. Has too be a fave.
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 8/4/2020 8:10:00 AM
Dear Mike, it's great to hear from you and I hope you're doing well in these challenging times.Thank you for your compliments and support which I very much appreciate! Enjoy a beautiful day! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 7/1/2020 8:46:00 PM
Back with a quick visit to say congratulations on your win, my friend! ~ John
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 8/4/2020 8:08:00 AM
Hi John, thank you so much for your lovely congratulations! Have a wonderful day, my friend! Best regards. Pandita
Date: 7/1/2020 3:43:00 PM
Pandita, congratulations on your win in my maze contest _Constance
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 7/1/2020 4:05:00 PM
Hi Constance, thank you so much for placing this piece on your list of winners! Kindest regards. Pandita
Date: 7/1/2020 2:46:00 PM
What a gripping tale of unrequited love Pandita! Love the way your muse has layers of emotions in the maze of trapped heart in love. Congratulations on your win! Blessings and love :)
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 7/1/2020 3:54:00 PM
Hi Aditi, thank you for visiting and leaving your lovely complimentary words! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 7/1/2020 12:58:00 AM
you’re trapped, suspended in a twisting maze...of unrequited, lethal love... lovely alliteration and flow Pandita.. Congrats..
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 7/1/2020 3:49:00 PM
Jenish, thank you so very much for your lovely complimentary words that I so appreciate! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 6/26/2020 4:54:00 PM
Pandita, I loved all the alliterative words of "sensuous serpent, sinfully seductive" that start with "S" like a snake! You have really captured well the powerful allure of temptation with this paraphrase of the Garden of Eden story, and perfectly included all the 10 required words. Very powerful poetry. Best wishes to you in the contest ~ John
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 7/1/2020 3:42:00 PM
Hi John, I thank you for your wonderful, complimentary words that I really appreciate! Best regards. Pandita
Date: 6/23/2020 1:22:00 PM
wow you certainly a-mazed me with the way you wove the words into a wonderful story, good luck in the contest, hope you are keeping well Pandita:-) hugs Jan xx
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 6/23/2020 3:48:00 PM
Thank you so much Jan - what a lovely compliment! I am so happy to hear from you and wish you and your loved ones all the best! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 6/23/2020 1:12:00 PM
Brilliant verse using all ten allocated words Pandita. Hope you're well Good luck in the contest Tom
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 6/23/2020 3:42:00 PM
Dear Tom, I appreciate receiving your high compliments and wishes - thank you very much, my friend! Best regards always. Pandita
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