thriveni c mysore Poet Rondeau

May

Eight Words 2 Poetry Contest -  Joseph May
Lilacs, Weary, Misty, Guitar, Cajole, Sigh, Slumber, Etching 
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Quote: “A man sees in the world what he carries in his heart.”
- Johann Wolfgang von Goethe
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One such spring, away from his muse
WEARY night, jaded SLUMBER blues
every other color looked grey
every other flower looked hay
betrayal sadness choked like noose

his MISTY eyes tried to confuse
his heart stabbed with brutal refuse
a tear not shed that heartless day
one such spring day

wasted, he sat under the spruce
LILACS blooms had such little use
to CAJOLE him to GUITAR play
he tried ETCHING letters away
softly sighed a SIGH of excuse
one such spring day

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Len Gasun September 1, 2024 at 5:41 AM Wow! Gorgeous poem you've written here my dear poet friend thriveni. Rondeau is one of the hardest types of poem for me to write but you did it excellently with ease in a melancholic sense of beauty using those required words. So creative you are. A winner for me. Thanks a lot for sharing. I loved it and enjoyed a lot. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs thriveni c mysore September 1, 2024 at 10:09 PM Dear poet friend, your appreciation of the poem means so much to me. I remain grateful for your blessings & love dear poet. I owe you big.

Valsa George August 28, 2024 at 9:11 PM Hi Thriveni, I find that you have cleverly used the words given to script a poem of great poignance. The quote is so meaningful and right and his mental mood and his feeling of desolation and despair are masterfully reflected in what he sees around. I am sure this is going to be placed high. All the Best. thriveni c mysore August 29, 2024 at 2:28 AM I am glad you appreciate this dear friend. I feel so happy to read your thoughts on my page, means so much to me. Thank you for the blessings.

Sam Kauffman August 27, 2024 at 4:58 PM Thriveni, wonderful use of the words to create this melancholy song. Your interpretation of Goethe is perfect. Sending you blessings. thriveni c mysore August 27, 2024 at 9:26 PM thank you for your kind visit dear poet. I appreciate your thoughts on this and I am grateful for the blessings. thank you.

Mystic Rose Rose August 27, 2024 at 2:00 PM I pray he found peace in His Guitar and in His song of broken dreams, perhaps God sent him a blessing in the end. thriveni c mysore August 27, 2024 at 9:23 PM you are so gentle dear poet, may God help all those sad dejected hearts. your comment reminded me one saying in our language -meaning "it is ok when you cry and the world is laughing, but it is unbearable if you laugh when the world is crying" thank you for the visit dear friend. stay blessed, cheers.

David Crandall August 25, 2024 at 10:45 PM Spring feels bleak without one's muse. Desolation, the opposite of Spring's promise. Very effective, to me. There seems truth in that quote. What one sees on the outside is a mirror of one's inside. thriveni c mysore August 26, 2024 at 7:18 PM I am so very glad to know your thoughts dear poet friend, you liked the quote, how I wish to read Goethe again. I feel sad that I cannot recall quickly and effectively such sayings. Life is made easy by such great men, only we don't know to employ such truths, don't you agree? Thank you. your comment sets me to think more. happy day dear friend.

Kim Rodrigues August 25, 2024 at 5:52 PM One such spring, away from his muse WEARY night, jaded SLUMBER blues every other color looked grey…love this opener! thriveni c mysore August 25, 2024 at 6:49 PM a pleasant visit and kind words dear poet. thank you so much. Blessings & cheers.

Evelyn Judy Buehler August 24, 2024 at 6:13 PM It was pure pleasure to read this beautiful poem, Thriveni! Best of wishes for the contest. thriveni c mysore August 24, 2024 at 9:11 PM Such a pleasant visit dear poet, you are kind and generous. thank you. I am grateful for your wishes and blessings. thank you.

Len Gasun August 24, 2024 at 8:38 AM Such a beautiful moving write my dear poet friend. You did this so well using those given words. I like this a lot and enjoyed. I think it will score high in the contest. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs thriveni c mysore August 24, 2024 at 9:10 PM Ah dear poet, thank you for your kind visit. I am so glad you liked this. I am grateful for your wishes and blessings dear . thank you.