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Matrimonial Demise

Smog’s gray melancholy, whiffs of the dying day, I brood, a morose musing mood in grim gloaming; memories are taunting in staccato display, withdrawn commiseration stirs pathos roaming. Words weaponized wreaked cold-blooded frosted arrows, hailed psyche pierced with valiant ‘I hate you!’ war cries; road to your heart’s ransom forevermore narrows, my matrimony’s unpredictable demise. Susan Ashley August 10, 2017 N/A For Contest: Eight Word Challenge – 3 Sponsor: John Hamilton Poem must include each of the eight following words: Crystal, Gloaming, Frosted, Forevermore, Pathos, Valiant, Melancholy, Unpredictable

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John Michaels

Date: 11/18/2017 3:58:00 AM

You expertly weave the key words into a seamless, sombre, tapestry... "Words Weaponized" so ably sums up the situation for those going through this process. Well done! Kind regards, John.

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/18/2017 8:12:00 PM

Thank you John for your taking the time to read my poetry and comment on my poem so beautifully.. Your visit is truly a pleasure and your lovely comment warms my heart and inspires a smile on my face.. my warmest regards always.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

Date: 11/16/2017 5:02:00 PM

You did a great job here, Susan; fitting in given words is not my forte, but you make it look easy. The poem itself is in keeping with your usual high standards. Take care of that golden pen:) Regards // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/16/2017 7:56:00 PM

Paul, thank you for sharing your treasured thoughts with me as I hold your talent in high regard. I enjoy your poetry immensely. Your lovely comment and wonderful visit is greatly appreciated. I welcome you to grace my poetry page as often as you wish my friend.. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Ralph Sergi

Date: 8/13/2017 8:53:00 PM

Hi Susan: A beautiful placement of the necessary words even to the close point of Alliteration! My deepest compliments!

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/13/2017 9:57:00 PM

Thank you so much for your wonderfully kind comment. I'm so happy that you enjoyed my poem. I read your work with much enjoyment as well :)

Janice Canerdy

Date: 8/12/2017 8:21:00 PM

GREAT job of working in all those required words smoothly, Susan! Janice

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/12/2017 8:37:00 PM

Thank you Janice for taking the time to comment on my poem. I so appreciate your valued opinion and your visit! :)

Alyssa Lorette

Date: 8/12/2017 1:52:00 PM

Eloquent use of words, I wish you luck, Susan! :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/12/2017 5:10:00 PM

Thank you so much Alyssa for your kind words and well wishes! :)

Akkina Downing

Date: 8/12/2017 8:21:00 AM

Susan, you are one of the many here who is very talented. Absolutely gorgeous! I love it!!! Hugs :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/12/2017 5:09:00 PM

Hi Akkina, thank you so much for taking the time to read my poem. Your comment is so uplifting. Thank you for making my day with your wonderful words :) Btw, you look lovely in your new pic!

Sean Kibble

Date: 8/12/2017 12:08:00 AM

What a marvellous write. You are very creative. Good luck in the contest and thank you for visiting my poems.

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/12/2017 12:11:00 AM

Thank you so much for your lovely comment and for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. I appreciate your visit.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/11/2017 8:12:00 PM

wow, you are an amazing writer. All I could do with the words was make a rhyming sonnet! (not yet posted).Brilliant work.

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/11/2017 9:06:00 PM

Hi Andrea, thank you so much for your very wonderful response to my poem. Your words of encouragement mean the world to me :) P.S. Your sonnets are the gold standard, I can't wait to read it!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/11/2017 7:00:00 AM

- You have "puzzled" the words so great, Susan - I think this is a winning poem, good luck - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/11/2017 8:10:00 PM

Thank you Anne-Lise for your very kind and encouraging words. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem :)

Corwin Donovan

Date: 8/10/2017 11:46:00 PM

I like all of your poetry and this is another one added to that list :^) very enjoyable read

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/11/2017 8:27:00 AM

Hi Corwin, thank you for always having a kind comment and for taking the time to read my poetry. :)