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Marion's Return

As Marion trod the old familiar path leading to the river of her childhood, she viewed the willow tree across the river and recalled with clarity the event that changed her life half a century ago - that memory which for all her adult life she‘d managed to suppress . . . She was being chased by Ellie down the path; Ellie, the fair haired younger sister favored by their father and wearing the golden pendant he had given her when she’d won a spelling bee. Yanking the pendant from her sister’s neck, Marion ran into the river’s icy water, threatening to throw the pendant in. Screaming, Ellie followed right behind. Farther into the river’s center, the two girls moved. Where the riverbed dipped sharply, Ellie had caught up. Suddenly the wind blew violently, The chain with its beautiful pendant slipped from Marion’s hand into the swirling water. Ellie tottered, falling backwards. Then the river was carrying Marion’s little sister to the other side. Marion called out, but Ellie did not answer. A strong swimmer, Marion swam to her sister’s lifeless body on the opposite bank where a nearby willow stood - witness to her crime. Marion now was standing where she once had stood that fateful day. The river had receded with time, but its current was still strong. She stood recalling her parents’ bitter tears and how she had escaped their wrath inventing her own version of the truth - that Ellie had run into the water by herself when the sudden wind came up causing her demise. She felt bad, but in the end, she became her father’s newfound pride and joy. Something glittered at the water’s edge. Marion, now heavy and clumsy with age, moved closer to see. Could it be after all these years? Yes, it was the pendant, shining in the river’s sludge! She stooped to pick it up, but lost her balance, falling forward toward the slanting floor. As she struggled, a great gust of wind moved her out. . .farther and farther to the middle. Before her head vanished below the water’s surface, she saw that old willow’s leaves flutter angrily. She could almost swear she saw the form of Ellie, fair sweet Ellie, beckoning her from the other side. For Frank Herrera's POEM ENDING WITH A 'CHILLING TWIST' Poetry Contest

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Date: 9/12/2016 8:15:00 AM
It reminds me of Alice in wonderland "Mrs Bedonebyasyoudid" which aimed at preventing children from doing wrong. So many ways to heed wrongdoers. So...she paid justly for what she did...the law of nature we like it or not! Well done Andrea!
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Date: 9/11/2016 7:51:00 PM
Elle got her revenge. Now she can rest in peace. Congrats, Andrea. :-)
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Date: 9/11/2016 6:00:00 PM
ohhh Andrea...crazy chills over here in Michigan! My fave in the contest. congrats on your placement lovely lady :)-luloo
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Date: 8/6/2015 5:44:00 PM
Man, goosebumps and chills. Great story, so glad it's not true.
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Date: 8/4/2015 4:17:00 PM
You are really into tragedy. Something must be bothering your mind. This reminds me of Maid Marion and Marian Anderson and Marian who had to do with the Army Rangers strangely. This takes the breath out of you. Jim Horn
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Date: 8/3/2015 2:58:00 AM
Great Andrea... perhaps you should think about script writing. This story of yours is well worthy of a short film - thank you Andrea - Lindsay
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Date: 8/2/2015 10:56:00 PM
Magnificent write Andrea n a sweet win! Big congrats!
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Date: 8/2/2015 7:25:00 PM
Andrea, I'm so glad Frank liked this well written piece.:-) I agree with Ruben you should write a book or short stories.You areba great story teller.Congratulations on a well deserved win:-)Alexis
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Date: 8/2/2015 6:41:00 PM
Beautifully, beautifully written.
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Date: 8/2/2015 4:51:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats so glad Frank liked this:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 8/2/2015 4:39:00 PM
Congrats on a great win Andrea....Nicely done...
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Date: 8/2/2015 4:25:00 PM
Great moral, all that glitters is gold. Congrats on your win
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Date: 8/2/2015 4:10:00 PM
Andrea, well done.... Congrats. SK
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Date: 8/2/2015 3:57:00 PM
Andrea, You are a great story teller, thanks for shared this excellence piece.........A.M.
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Date: 8/2/2015 11:06:00 AM
WOW Andrea you had me gripped from start to finish - love the twist at the end - good luck:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 8/2/2015 9:51:00 AM
Andrea, this is moving piece. Your words took me on a mysterious journey. What you have penned is like a great novel, I felt like I was there gazing at the icy river.I was not expecting the end. It was a unexpected twist. Is it for the contest? If it is I wish the best of luck in the contest:-)Alexis 7+++
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/2/2015 10:43:00 AM
Glad you liked the twist. I was thinking it was not twisty enough! Yes, for the contest. I got in right under the wire!!
Date: 8/2/2015 9:43:00 AM
I love story telling and this is it at it's best. Every image and sound comes to life and the lesson that your own truths are never hidden from you is a particular soap box subject for me. Wonderful writing. Kind regards, Ian
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/2/2015 10:43:00 AM
Thanks so much, Ian.
Date: 8/2/2015 9:40:00 AM
What an ambitious piece of work! Much different than most of your work, A rating of 7. Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/2/2015 10:42:00 AM
It almost sounds like you think the rest of my stuff sucks. hahaha. Thanks, Matt. I'm glad you like it. I am not inclined toward free verse, but I do enjoy narrative style.

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