Maelstrom

I heard the drub of rain pelting the roof Unaware that a storm had been brewing Roar of thunder, flash of lightning gave proof that I had no idea, no inkling of what I was doing. Spirit numbed and body drenched I ventured into the maelstrom, unaware or perhaps I didn't care. My eyes were clenched preventing tears from falling. Loneliness is hard to bear Sorrow bit at my heels where puddles formed I swallowed a cry so no one would hear my sobbing On I trudged while within me the maelstrom stormed Confusion inside my head, heartbeat throbbing. Charybdis' whirlpool swirled, trying to drag me in Crested waves carried me toward its center The tightrope I walked was a tenuous line and lost forever I would be if I decided to enter. On the edge of giving in, I swam for what seemed hours The surge of flood tide would not claim me tonight On sanity's shore I sat once more, allowing the showers to sting my upturned face and have their moment of respite. March 20, 2023 Writing Challenge - 'M' Words Sponsor: Constance La France
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Kauffman Avatar
April 6, 2023 at 3:57 PM
Wonderful imagery and marvelous metaphors Jenna all pulling together your poem into a "moment of respite." You build the tension with images of chaos wonderfully. Blessings! Happy Easter.
Logan Avatar
April 6, 2023 at 5:37 PM
Thanks a bunch, Sam. Smiles on you for acknowledging the risen Son and the reason for it.
La France Avatar
April 3, 2023 at 4:54 AM
Jenna, excellent writing and thank you for sharing your poem with us in my Writing Challenge congratulations !
Logan Avatar
April 6, 2023 at 5:35 PM
Thank you for honoring this one, Constance.
Parker Avatar
March 23, 2023 at 9:58 AM
Hurricanes within can completely overcome the public soul. Escape is all and all but tough and strained to nth degree. Contest winner for a Belle (no doubt)! Congratulations. ~:o)
Logan Avatar
March 23, 2023 at 11:17 AM
Twas a winner, Arlo. The power of the sea empowers a hurricane. Together, they are deadly. Thank you.
Cunningham Avatar
March 23, 2023 at 3:24 AM
Love your choice of the M word Jenna, you wrote a powerful verse. Just saw Tania's comment, big congratulations to you. Tom
Logan Avatar
March 23, 2023 at 3:40 AM
Thanks so very much, Tom. It was my first contest in some time… maybe the last.
Kitchin Avatar
March 22, 2023 at 3:58 PM
Jenna, back to congratulate you on your first place win!
Logan Avatar
March 22, 2023 at 5:00 PM
Thanks to the nth, my sweet Yankee friend.
Daniel Avatar
March 22, 2023 at 4:03 AM
I like this one, Jenna, congratulations:)
Logan Avatar
March 22, 2023 at 6:45 AM
Good morning, Jo and thank you ever so much.
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March 21, 2023 at 1:58 PM
A deep meaningful poem Jenna, I think life is all about trying to keep one step ahead of the all engulfing maelstrom, be that insanity, depression, or indeed death, the metaphoric sting can help to keep us focused, and give us respite from its remorseless clutches, congratulations on your win, cheers David
Logan Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 2:03 PM
Hi David. I think you've covered all the bases for the chance that a maelstrom of any sort can redirect our lives. Thank you for being so supportive of my poetry.
Koplin Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 1:15 PM
“On sanity's shore I sat once more, allowing the showers to sting my face and have its moment of respite.“ Awesome ink! Congratulations on your win!!
Logan Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 2:01 PM
Thank you, Mark. I know there were many placements, and one of them was on your 'Mother' poem, so congratulations to you as well.
Bauer Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 1:03 PM
wow! this is magnificent, jenna! best of luck in the "m" challenge...
Logan Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 2:00 PM
Thank you so much, Ilene.
Bueckert Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 9:50 AM
Sorrowful and beautiful words, powerful write you have done here
Logan Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 1:59 PM
I'm delighted that you liked this one. Thanks, Hat.
Andresen Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 9:38 AM
- A wonderful poem, Jenna ... with a lot of emotions ... congratulations :) - hugs
Logan Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 1:58 PM
Many thanks, Anne-Lise. Your comments always encourage me.
Goldsmith Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 9:33 AM
Congratulations on your win. A wonderful yet sad write/story. Love your ending. Have a great/blessed day writing away...........
Logan Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 1:58 PM
Thanks for your kindness in commenting, Paula.
Alex Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 9:08 AM
"Loneliness is hard to bear" - great truth, indeed! I always enjoy reading your poems. Though the zeitgeist of this poem seems melancholic, this proves to be very optimistic. Congratulations!
Logan Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 1:57 PM
Thanks, Chris. I've appreciated the many comments you've left for me. I've been in that mood lately, but a positive ending is where this one took me.
Fowler Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 7:15 AM
Hey Jenna. Glad to see you back in the mix! This is a daunting maelstrom you face with this stunning write. Congratulations on your win! :)
Logan Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 8:32 AM
Thank you for your gracious words, Linda. You always write encouraging comments, and I am negligent on returning your kindness. I'll try to do better.
Chuuk Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 6:06 AM
Fantastic write, Jenna. I enjoyed this one. I wish you good luck in the contest. :)
Logan Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 6:59 AM
Thank you very much, Fin, for the comment and good luck wishes.
Kitchin Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 4:09 AM
Jenna, a captivating poem, best of luck in the contest!
Logan Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 4:22 AM
Thanks on both thoughts, Tania.
M  Avatar
March 20, 2023 at 11:39 PM
Another talented beautiful Jenna poem…just lovely! Debx
Logan Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 4:21 AM
A few of us missing. Sorry, but I’ll not abandon Milton Creek.
M  Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 4:13 AM
Running smoothly but ever so quiet! Boss
Logan Avatar
March 21, 2023 at 12:49 AM
Hi Deb. Thank you for leaving such a sweet remark. Everything ok at the saloon? I've not been in the Creek much lately.
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