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Lungs Wrapped In Black

~ emptiness chokes lungs of night coughing from rib caged fever, a tight-rope walker lies still... amidst full moon’s howl pain, wrapped in black holocaust as her bridal dress withers, staining a torn, cancelled love… pre-nuptial songs crack ~ _________ Rick Parise's CONTEST: One Of Your Favz - 1 - 8 LINES!!! OLD POEM

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John Posey

Date: 6/25/2013 4:41:00 PM

Nette, you write things I would never attempt... That's why you are a winner... Congrats... Jake

Kim Merryman

Date: 6/25/2013 1:38:00 PM

Deep and dark! Congrats on your win, Nette! Love, Kim

Kash Poet

Date: 6/25/2013 11:03:00 AM

Amazing poetry here Nette!Congrats on the win.

Heather Ober

Date: 6/25/2013 7:10:00 AM

Such an intense write, Nette! You are so good at creating haunting images. Congratulations!

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 6/25/2013 6:32:00 AM

Nette congratulations on your superb poem. A well deserve win. Warm Smiles, Connie

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/24/2013 11:21:00 PM

You have such great imagery in that second part. Love "black holocaust" Congrats, Nette.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/25/2011 12:11:00 PM

Congratulations on your win in the contest of Tracie "Dodoitsu Darkness" Nette. Love, Carol

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/23/2011 2:32:00 PM

Congrats on your win...Sara

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 9/22/2011 11:20:00 PM

Lovin the --DoDo---It's--You! LOL CreepY, Mellow, Twisted and bent like Elbow...Glad I get to read your Good stuff F.O.C........what a steal. You got a lotta style and guts. The world of Literacy literally needs more Nette Pots! can I call you Nette Pot? Ok. I won't! But I think that Nickname is Realer than Real Deal Holyfield! You the ISH ! :)

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/22/2011 5:17:00 PM

Congrats Nette luv on another superb second place win with exceptional poetry my friend.. am working in between moving on your new contest entry..thankxx for my placement in previous contest.. oh so behind..moving is so time consuming.. oh..

Nancy Jones

Date: 9/19/2011 8:54:00 PM

indeed.. powerful! beauty evE~n

Tim B

Date: 9/18/2011 10:57:00 PM

Great imagery here nette, and such a cautionary tale :). Love it as always, powerful words and excellent flow! -Tim

Gwendolen Song

Date: 9/18/2011 7:23:00 AM

HI Nette, Oh yeah, this qualifies as dark poetry. Love the tight-rope walker lying still bc of his lung ailment. You can' get any darker than the holocaust either. Wow. Thanks for commenting on my recent work, Nette. You have that "special eye" ......lol. Gwendolen

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/18/2011 1:42:00 AM

very unusual imagery. COOL one, Nette.

Constance La France

Date: 9/17/2011 11:19:00 PM

This is amazing nette, your presentation is spectacular as usual, you are a true poetic artist, and thanks for your kind comments and support of my poetry~~

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/17/2011 4:00:00 PM

Enjoyed reading your contest entry..It will surely be in the top...I hope that it is not life but just a topic..Good luck in the contest..My work "Sauntered Freely" was not for a contest..I awoke at 3 A.M. with that going through my brain..Sara

Joe Maverick

Date: 9/17/2011 3:50:00 PM

A verrry dark piece here Nette, and wishing you winning results....

Audrey Haick

Date: 9/17/2011 3:50:00 PM

Ah..this is deep and dark, Nette. Perfect for Tracie's contest. I guess I will not be writing one ..not feeling it right now. This is one for the Winners's List as it is very good! Love, Annalise

Kash Poet

Date: 9/17/2011 3:12:00 PM

hey CELESTIAL,this IS Tracie's contest.NOT Natalie's!Check contest page!!

Russell Sivey

Date: 9/17/2011 2:57:00 PM

What a submission for Natalies's contest! You have again created a very interesting approach to the contest...and I for one really like it! You have an awesome poem nette, incredible work!!

Russell Sivey
Date: 9/17/2011 3:12:00 PM

Is it Natalie's contest or Tracie's contest?

Kash Poet

Date: 9/17/2011 2:39:00 PM

A touching write Nette.Very nice interpretation of the contest photo.So can you write more than one Dodoitsu?Best wishes....

Kash Poet

Date: 9/17/2011 2:37:00 PM

is it Natalie's contest?

Kash Poet

Date: 9/17/2011 2:34:00 PM

Ring!Ring!I am here!!