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Lullaby

Ruby eyed cuckoo Shall I stop “my lullaby?” “Koo, koo” lulls baby This is my husband's theme. Thanks to him

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/26/2013 12:58:00 AM

Change this to senryu theme. and put it straight to Susan's contest!!! she would be crazy if she did not like it. (well, I guess you would have to remove the word red in line one and "my" in last line to keep the syllable count) but with that, It would be a sure winner I would think.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/26/2013 12:56:00 AM

oh my gosh, this is SO DELIGHTFUL> FAVE!!!!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/21/2013 7:53:00 AM

His poetic soul expressed through you words. That is very romantic.;0)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/23/2013 6:40:00 AM

Thanks for bringing me into your story.

Manel Gunatillake
Date: 5/21/2013 9:44:00 AM

Yes, he criticized my previous poem saying that I have destroyed the beauty of the nature. "Hush! my baby cannot sleep" by using those words I've tried to stop the beautiful sound of the cuckoo's cry. he asked me to write it this way instead appreciating the cuckoo's whistle. thank you for your commenting.