Paul Callus Poet Rondeau Redouble

Lover and Friend

Relationships are precious, like lover and friend 
Cherished much longer – built on trusting love and care	
Hence, losing one: melancholy – a tragic end	
Why have to lose one? Is life really that unfair? 

We are best friends, till death us part is what we swear 
Horizons shift from dark to blue on sprawling sand 
Through thick and thin, the solid bond will halt despair 
Relationships are precious, like lover and friend 

Stars and moon converge setting a happy trend	
Our dreams and goals pave one everlasting affair 
To each other's side we stand firmly to defend 
Cherished much longer – built on trusting love and care 

When eyes behold not just a friend but even more	
The carefree feelings change and deep emotions blend	
Will it be worth the risk that surely is in store?	
Hence, losing one: melancholy – a tragic end	

The battle rages like wild tempest right inside 
The urges unrestrained are there to give, to share 
Like burning lava hot to handle or to hide 
Why have to lose one? Is life really that unfair? 

The jewels’ sparkle has to last and never fade	
A lasting sacrifice is one that leads the heart	
To rise above the pains from which true love is made 
Lover and friend must aim to play a lasting part	
Relationships are precious. 

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Contest: Collaboration
First 3 stanzas: Olive_eloi Guillermo
Next 3 stanzas: Paul Callus
April 15, 2014
Form: Rondeau Redouble
Sponsor: Jared Pickett

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Jack Horne October 25, 2020 at 12:18 PM you write beautifully together - what an insightful write Paul Callus November 29, 2020 at 11:33 PM Thank you, Jack. Excuse the late reply, but somehow I was not alerted to your visit. Regards // paul

Eileen Manassian August 29, 2014 at 3:04 PM You write well together. I didn't know it was a collab till I came to the end. Lovely thoughts here on love and friendship. Paul Callus August 29, 2014 at 4:35 PM Many thanks Eileen. Can you imagine trying to write a collab poem in a couple of hours by going backwards and forward using a faulty connection?! and using a difficult form, too. Managed to enter the contest by the smallest of margins! A real race against time, but Olive was there to whip me right up to the finishing line:) hugs // paul

Casarah Nance May 22, 2014 at 5:42 PM great collaboration :) cool poem both of u two :) Paul Callus May 23, 2014 at 2:09 PM Thank you Casarah...so glad you enjoyed it :) // paul

Robin Davis May 17, 2014 at 8:36 PM Paul This is such a charming and sweet write. The relationship aspect is displayed in a wonderful and passionate way. Thank you for the great comment on my Sunlight poem. Paul Callus May 18, 2014 at 2:40 AM Many thanks Robin! your comments are lovely and with sense:) Have a good day and take care. // paul

Kelly Deschler April 18, 2014 at 1:00 AM I did not know that this was a collaboration until after I read it. The poem is seamless, I could not tell which lines were written by who. A wonderful write! Well done to you both!...Thank you very much for the kind congrats, Paul. :) Paul Callus April 18, 2014 at 8:55 AM Hi Kelly, always a pleasure to be part of reciprocal visits :) and to receive positive feedback :) // paul

Andrea Dietrich April 17, 2014 at 10:15 PM gosh, that was ambitious doing a rondeau redouble. I have never tried one of these, and I am impressed to see you two doing it. I hope Jared likes it. Did he judge his contest yet? He just loves these kinds of endeavors!! Paul Callus April 18, 2014 at 8:52 AM I confess...this was my first attempt at this form, not my choice, but that of the 'instigator' Olive_eloi :) It received an honorable mention. (not bad when you consider that it was written hurriedly in the last couple of hours before closure of contest!) Txs for stopping by; your visits are a source of encouragement :) // paul

Shaista Aziz April 17, 2014 at 7:16 AM A great poem paul! I liked the relationship between lover and frnd Paul Callus April 17, 2014 at 7:28 AM Thank you Shaista. Relashionships are important in life, be they family, friends, or lovers. cu // paul

Shadow Hamilton April 15, 2014 at 5:13 PM a great blend which compliments you both hugs and gl Paul Callus April 15, 2014 at 5:36 PM Thank you SH. Always appreciate your visits..and hugs :) // paul

Ivor Kos April 15, 2014 at 2:49 PM It gladdens my soul to see a new poem by yourself today. I was going to be sad otherwise. I like the idiom :Through thick and thin: and the vocabulary. Paul Callus April 15, 2014 at 3:29 PM Hello Ivo; always glad to see you here. Visiting and reading different post helps to increase awareness of what people here are capable of writing, and what forms they use to express themselves. We learn from one another :) // paul

Nette Onclaud April 15, 2014 at 1:03 PM well, you both really got into the scene.. greeat job, paul and olive.. sweet congrats with huggs Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser April 15, 2014 at 2:52 PM hahahaha remember Paul: "what things happen at night... :D :P... YES LOL! last night, even my connection isn't cooperating fast.... your messages i receive late...,.. lol i like that instigator with a whip :P:P:P but not so cruel :Phahahahaha YES, UNFORGETTABLE :D! ==olive_eloi laughing with the whip lol Paul Callus April 15, 2014 at 1:33 PM Thanks a lot nette :) you won't believe this was a last minute night job :) still, it was a mixture of fun and satisfaction. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser April 15, 2014 at 11:13 AM Our "craziness" paid off :D lools not on any placement but it still recognize.. Again , thank you for the collaboration.. --THanks mumumumuuuuch! We'll not forget this..:)-- olive_eloi with claps Paul Callus April 15, 2014 at 1:29 PM Did you say "craziness" !!! Getting an honorable mention is already an achievement considering everything. Thanks to you as well...for being the instigator with the whip :):) another unforgettable experience :) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser April 15, 2014 at 12:05 AM Paul hahahahahahahaha still each time I see what we made it can't help but paint a smile on my face.. LOL!!! Thank you really for the collaboration..:) I'm glad we give it a try as fast as we can... LOL! Fun working with you.. God bless always and take care... You really are great and we made it on deadline.. :D-- giggles from olive_eloisa :) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser April 15, 2014 at 5:31 AM hahaha.. :D!! so soooorry. ;) hehehehe i enjoyed the time thing lol.... i know you can do it, i trust you.. ;) hahaha yes whatever the outcome is, the thing is we did have lil fun :D "what happens at night.. :P! +olive_eloi :P Paul Callus April 15, 2014 at 1:50 AM Good morning Olive_eloi :) I should let everybody know how you treated an old man....flogging him to to arrive at the finishing line on time!!:) Joking apart...it was fun, whatever the outcome :) God bless you. // paul

Jan Allison April 14, 2014 at 7:31 PM Paul and Olive_Eloi this is a beautifully written piece - made me feel quite emotional. Good luck in the contest. Hugs Jan x Paul Callus April 15, 2014 at 1:43 AM Thank you Jan; glad you liked this "race against time" poem! appreciate your lovely comments...and good luck wishes :) // paul

Tim Smith April 14, 2014 at 6:22 PM This is marvelous Paul..You guys did a tremendous job....Tim Paul Callus April 14, 2014 at 6:27 PM Thank you Tim.....would you imagine....this was the fastest ever song written...must be a record!! out of the blue! // glad you like it. // paul

Karen Murphy April 14, 2014 at 6:01 PM Very Good Writing Paul. You are right that relationships are built on loving care and trust. I have been with my man 20 years this June and we have been through ALOT. But we love each other still And I hate thinking about him not being here when he passes from this life. My only hope is that we go together. I can not imagine my life without him in it. Paul Callus April 14, 2014 at 6:13 PM Thank you Karen for the visit and understanding comments. In married life we share and enjoy and suffer together. Nobody likes to think of when inevitable parting arrives; but that's life. For those who believe in an afterlife there is always hope...for eternity. // paul