Love Will Triumph

The fire goes unlit, within its granite frame
heated is the argument, cold the man. 
Husband mine, please accept this suitors claim 
for he is worthy of your daughter Ann.
See her downcast face, her melancholy,  
she sickens so and I've done all I can.
Raise her ivory form, a father's glory 
accept her young man, he's come hat in hand. 
Let's end this day with a ribald story 
of how you've gifted what you once had banned.
Husband mine, relent and let love have sway.

Light the fire let the lovers flame be fanned
let this fine young couple wed without delay.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Zerbst Avatar
October 5, 2013 at 8:52 PM
Interesting way to tell the story, as a compact monologue. You did a good job of fitting a whole plot into the limited number of lines, avoiding any awkwardness that could possibly have resulted.
Puddifoot Avatar
October 2, 2013 at 3:46 PM
I think this is very elegantly penned and totally in keeping with the era and the painting - congrats on your win! :)
Adams Avatar
October 1, 2013 at 6:53 PM
enjoyed your take on the painting...great write...congrats on your win :)
Dietrich Avatar
October 1, 2013 at 5:08 PM
VEry good usage of the terza rima form, Debs. I like how you told the story. Congrats.
Deschler Avatar
September 22, 2013 at 5:01 PM
This is a very fine piece of poetry, and I think it represents the painting very well. Fantastic work! I wish you good luck in the contest!...I have also entered with a poem titled, "Love Will Triumph".
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 7, 2013 at 6:34 PM
A wonderful and impressive entry for the contest Debbie. Sure to get noticed, especially in the form you chose. I loved it!
Onclaud Avatar
September 7, 2013 at 2:59 PM
such a gentle yet firm plea... love must be given freely to find joy; a poetic delight, debbie... many thanks for including me in your line-up; i had a hard time doing it but felt real good you resonated with it... :) huggs
Richards Avatar
September 6, 2013 at 7:34 PM
The title says it all! Your eloquence says it even better...... and as a postscript, my gratitude for helping me along the way...I was stirred by your Walking Softly contest, and honored by my placement. Thanks so much! You have always encouraged me to better myself..I'm very grateful!
Manassian Avatar
September 6, 2013 at 4:26 PM
FORGOT TO GIVE IT A 777777777! :)
Manassian Avatar
September 6, 2013 at 4:25 PM
Debbie!!!! This is for the contest? It really is a great write. You captured every nuance of the painting so well. :) I'm here to thank you FROM THE BOTTOM OF MY HEART for the place you gave me on the SIJO contest. I'm honored, humbled, and thrilled! You have NO idea. My Korean friends thought I didn't have the ghost of a chance! The lovely Sijo you posted were inspiring, as well as your personal encouragement. THANK YOU, Debbie!!!! HUGSSSSSSS
Anglesey Avatar
September 5, 2013 at 10:20 AM
This is such an eloquent gift of inspiration. I admire your talent ...Thank you for the indepth comments on my poem 'Until They Shine'... I wrote a reply to your comments and thank you so much for the insight :)
May Avatar
September 4, 2013 at 8:56 PM
wonderful write Debbie....best wishes
Harrell Avatar
September 1, 2013 at 7:00 AM
I like it, Deb. Very gentle. Let the couple do what they want to do. This reminds me of Romeo and Juliet for some reason :)
Dietrich Avatar
August 31, 2013 at 5:10 PM
wow, you did an awesome job with this one, Deb!!! Exceptional.
Chircop Avatar
August 31, 2013 at 7:19 AM
lovely message....To see the happiness in our daughter's eyes even if what she wants isn t what we aimed for..Beautiful thoughts penned.
Loving Iii Avatar
August 31, 2013 at 1:06 AM
Children always bring together what the devil devides. Justice go along with it.
Carroll Avatar
August 30, 2013 at 7:35 PM
Hi Debbie, Nice write of love and acceptance,, Ken
Mehta Avatar
August 30, 2013 at 7:18 PM
Fine understanding between the couple to release love,
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