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Love Train Haiku

ATTRACTION,,,,,

                    Eyes glued to body,
                    Roaming from head to toe,
                    Drooling mouth water...

FIRST LOVE,,,,,,
                    
                    A sudden attack,
                    Swept off your feet,
                    Above cloud nine...

IN LOVE,,,,,,,,,,,

                    Communication amazing,
                    Thoughts wave connect,
                     Heart beating as one...
   

               My first HAIKU

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Susan Ashley

Date: 9/13/2017 8:17:00 PM

Beautifully done Richard, great imagery throughout. Enjoyed reading your poetry this evening!

Richard Palmer
Date: 9/14/2017 7:44:00 PM

thanks Susan,enjoyed reading yours as well

Amanda Mawu

Date: 7/15/2016 10:11:00 AM

Nice

Richard Palmer
Date: 9/14/2017 7:43:00 PM

thanks Amanda,,,been busy taking care of life but i'm back,check out my new poem

Jadazzle United

Date: 6/21/2014 4:28:00 PM

Wonderful first haiku Richard they flow so well together. Hugs jan xxx

Richard Palmer
Date: 6/26/2014 8:06:00 AM

thanks much Jadazzle,oxox

Skat A

Date: 5/19/2014 4:46:00 PM

Can I have a ride on this love train, Richard.... Enjoyed stopping by:) Love ~SKAT~

Richard Palmer
Date: 5/20/2014 1:25:00 PM

hop aboard girl,enjoy the ride,,,thanks Skat oxox

Sherese Gooden

Date: 7/8/2013 9:02:00 PM

Great, Richard. I enjoyed this.

Richard Palmer
Date: 10/31/2013 1:32:00 PM

happy you did,thanks Sherese

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/1/2013 9:07:00 PM

Richard, congratulations on having your poem Featured this past week. It was nice reading your poem tonight. Goodnight~ Linda

Richard Palmer
Date: 10/31/2013 1:31:00 PM

thanks Linda a.k.a Poet A oxox

Michael Dom

Date: 5/13/2013 2:08:00 AM

Hey, nice structuring. Lusty kind of haiku - senryu? Keep riding that train!

Richard Palmer
Date: 6/6/2013 8:31:00 AM

toot toot,lol I will Michael thanks much

Sukmawati Komala

Date: 5/6/2013 8:25:00 AM

he he.. so fantastic <3

Richard Palmer
Date: 6/6/2013 8:30:00 AM

thanks S.K oxox

Mohammad Yamin

Date: 1/22/2013 12:23:00 PM

Amazing Haikos -very impressive. Thanks for your appreciation of my Senryu Love, Richard -Mohammad

Richard Palmer
Date: 1/24/2013 8:26:00 PM

thank you Mohammad,you are welcome

Juanita Thorn

Date: 1/13/2013 1:31:00 AM

This is awesome....describes the initial attraction to true love perfectly in so few words.

Richard Palmer
Date: 1/13/2013 5:26:00 AM

thank you Juanita,try my best

Anna-Marie Docherty

Date: 1/10/2013 7:04:00 AM

Keep them going - if these are your first attempts there is promise for you... one small hint is with the last one, just do a recount of first line...? Not an expert but I do try them myself, so hope it helps.

Richard Palmer
Date: 1/10/2013 12:22:00 PM

thanks Anna,happy you enjoyed,gonna try a few more getting the knack of it lol

Mari Banks

Date: 1/10/2013 12:01:00 AM

Greetings. I found these vivid and engaging. Particularly the first. I could just see the drool! lol Love Haiku.

Richard Palmer
Date: 1/10/2013 4:44:00 AM

thanks Mari,someone needs a dribbler lol

John Posey

Date: 1/7/2013 5:21:00 AM

Richard, my friend, As you may know, I had a bad case of Haiku fever awhile back and can speak with some authority on the subject. Once started they are persistant little devils. and can really get under your skin. Now you can trap them and if you get enough of them, cook them up..... They go great with beer...... great Job..... Jake

Richard Palmer
Date: 1/8/2013 6:27:00 AM

thank you very much John,you get the beers,I will do the cooking lol

Frank Polgar

Date: 1/2/2013 6:40:00 PM

Really like the three steps. Think that happens to a lot of people. But what happens when we fall out of love? A follow up haiku perhaps?

Richard Palmer
Date: 1/2/2013 7:36:00 PM

ok gonna give it a shot,thanks Frank

Daver Austin

Date: 1/2/2013 8:56:00 AM

I love Haiku, Richard. Keep writing them. And thanks for reading my stuff. Love, daver

Richard Palmer
Date: 1/2/2013 9:38:00 AM

THANK YOU Daver,you are welcome

Debbie Duncan

Date: 1/2/2013 12:27:00 AM

Well I like these well enough,,, I wrote a few myself... Happy New Year Richard ;}

Richard Palmer
Date: 1/2/2013 5:13:00 AM

happy new year Debbie,thank you oxox

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/1/2013 12:03:00 PM

Hello Richard, , making an appearance on the soup today. Only 2 wish you this coming year to be a glorious one in which rewards all your future poetry with success. I love the time I took out of the first day of the year. 1-1-2013* :-) Just to wish you the best of 2013. Take care my dear poet friend. Thank you for sharing the love train haiku..love them. ~xox~LINDA

Richard Palmer
Date: 1/2/2013 5:12:00 AM

thank you very much Linda,wishing you the greatest 2013 gift LOVE AND MORE LOVE,have a wonderful year oxox

Briana Lynn Minard-Adler

Date: 12/29/2012 1:58:00 PM

This is really good, I love it

Richard Palmer
Date: 12/30/2012 5:08:00 AM

thank you Briana

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 12/29/2012 7:41:00 AM

HAPPY NEW YEAR 2013,RICHARD !!!!!!! / / oxox Anne-Lise :)

Richard Palmer
Date: 12/30/2012 5:02:00 AM

thank you very much Anne,same to you,oxox

Lucas Ongawo

Date: 12/29/2012 6:21:00 AM

Richard, i appreciate your stopping by, somehow they are granted, nice one too it feels like first love too.. hmm!- Lucas-

Richard Palmer
Date: 12/29/2012 6:58:00 AM

thanks Lucas,lol

Sukmawati Komala

Date: 12/29/2012 5:50:00 AM

Hey Richard...thank you so much for your stopping by,,, and appreciate so very much your nice comment... wishing you have a blessed new year...Happy New Year ...<3

Richard Palmer
Date: 12/29/2012 5:58:00 AM

you are welcome SK,same to you oxox for the new year

Susan Palli

Date: 12/24/2012 9:57:00 AM

Great job!

Richard Palmer
Date: 12/24/2012 2:34:00 PM

thanks Susan,but I think it needs a little work

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/23/2012 6:36:00 PM

Merry Christmas and belated birthday Richard.

Richard Palmer
Date: 12/23/2012 8:06:00 PM

thank you very much Richard

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 12/23/2012 5:35:00 AM

A little Christmas visit to you Richard. <3 Hope your Christmas will be peaceful and nice!! Sending you a big, warm Christmas hug !!! - MERRY CHRISTMAS - // Anne-Lise :)

Richard Palmer
Date: 12/23/2012 1:07:00 PM

Merry Christmas to you too Anne,warm oxox,fulljoy your holidays