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Love Story Oh, how I remember days full of ardent cheer Enamored in prospects of romance so sincere! Believing love so precious would never end Floating on emotions that eagerly befriend. Despair then ravished my young tender heart And all my aspirations suddenly blew apart. He never told me what caused him to flee, Walking out of my life without even telling me. How gullible of me to believe untruths he said Letting him seduce love, taking me for granted. Gladly you found me when I was hopeless wreck, As shattered dreams trailed a tragic heartbreak. Now I adore how you hug me with gentle care, Approaching me softly with a joy of teasing dare, Loving me deeply like no one has ever before, Embarking on a journey our love would explore. Your loving hands hold me as if a delicate flower, As you surrender tenderly like you wish to cower, Whispering as a moth whirling breeze of fresh air, Burning my flame eminently with a loving flare. Then we travelled to vistas of kingdom unseen, A paradise of enduring love fit for king and queen, There I surrendered me as you fondly appealed As union of our anxious desires eagerly fulfilled. Now as you contemplate pending wedding bells I'm desolate to admit what my wary heart foretells, My sweet love I regret deeply how this will end As I have fallen in love with your sexy best-friend. First Place November 3, 2017 Love Story Sponsor: Silent One

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Date: 7/8/2022 6:32:00 AM
A great love poem which I have been reading enjoying the flow of emotions, its sweet rhythm and passionate intensity written in your innate flair for language. But the twist at the end is disheartening !
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Date: 11/6/2017 2:17:00 AM
Great Poem Vijay... The only thing that we need is MORE love..
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/6/2017 6:29:00 AM
Thank you Pashang!
Date: 11/5/2017 11:24:00 AM
Love the twist at the end -- accomplished with great cunning and skill! Excellent poem, Vijay. My best regards. :) john
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Date: 11/6/2017 6:28:00 AM
Thank you john!
Date: 11/5/2017 10:09:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win Vijay, great poem and brilliant twist, excellent. :))
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Date: 11/6/2017 6:28:00 AM
Thank you Roy!
Date: 11/5/2017 9:32:00 AM
Vijay, such a sensuous love poem so wondrously written in beautiful rhythm and rhyme and great content.., love's tragic twist at the end was deftly expressed... rebound relationships never end happily.., sigh.., poor guy :( Congratulations on your first place win!!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/6/2017 6:28:00 AM
Thank you Susan!
Date: 11/5/2017 8:44:00 AM
That's quite the twist ! Well written. Congrats on your win, Vijay.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/6/2017 6:27:00 AM
Thank you Line!
Date: 11/5/2017 7:11:00 AM
You naughty boy! lol! The master of rhyme has done it again... Congratulations on your first place in the contest..
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/6/2017 6:27:00 AM
Thank you Silent One!
Date: 11/5/2017 6:39:00 AM
Congratulation on your win, Vijay with a nice poem ending in suspense.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/6/2017 6:27:00 AM
Thank you Subimal!
Date: 11/4/2017 11:14:00 AM
What a surprise ending, Vijay! Still, this is one great romantic poem. I was so into the spirit of love flowing throughout this gorgeous poem, until her wandering eyes went looking elsewhere. Bummer dude. You gave us such a delicious enchilada, but took away the spicy ranchero sauce. You a bad man ... lol! Great poem though. Love and smiles always.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/4/2017 12:53:00 PM
Thanks Freddie!
Date: 11/4/2017 7:12:00 AM
Excellent entry, Vijay: We all love a surprise ending. Good Luck in the contest. SuZ
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/4/2017 7:13:00 AM
Thank you suZ.
Date: 11/3/2017 5:55:00 PM
oh wow, you really got me at the end. GREAT twist and cool story, Vijay!!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/3/2017 6:31:00 PM
Thank you Andrea!
Date: 11/3/2017 3:47:00 PM
- Vijay, I love this story ... really wonderful written - Best wishes in the contest ... and a lovely weekend ... take care of the love :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/3/2017 4:27:00 PM
Thank you Anne-Lise--appreciate your comments--happy weekend to you as well!
Date: 11/3/2017 2:29:00 PM
vijay, what a twist...ohh,a delightful poem.. you are a bag of surprises; very nice!..huggs
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Date: 11/3/2017 4:26:00 PM
Thank you nette, appreciate your comments!
Date: 11/3/2017 9:11:00 AM
Such a beautiful poem Vijay you write so well. your ending was quite a surprise I didn’t see that coming. We’ll done!
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Date: 11/3/2017 1:27:00 PM
Thank you Edward--appreciate your comments!
Date: 11/3/2017 8:21:00 AM
Wow Vijay , that was a surprise ending! This is well written with so many good lines. I like the line ..whispering as a moth whirling breeze of fresh air. ! Good luck in the contest :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/3/2017 9:02:00 AM
I'm always so happy to read your comments--many thanks for the insights in your thoughts here, and in your poems!
Date: 11/3/2017 8:12:00 AM
"The heart has its reasons that reason doesn't understand " J. J. Rousseau! Well, c'est la vie mon ami, Vijay! Hahaha! Wonderfully done!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/3/2017 9:00:00 AM
What a wonderful quote, my friend--you are always inspiring--many thanks!
Date: 11/3/2017 7:43:00 AM
Screaming at the end! What a turn of events! GL in contest!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/3/2017 8:58:00 AM
Appreciate your comments Kim--many thanks!
Date: 11/3/2017 7:38:00 AM
Aw, I love the ending, "...As I have fallen in love with your sexy best-friend," such an awesome line! You made me laugh by this ending, but it's so true, it happens all the time! And sometimes they end up getting married, putting a strain on the friendship of both people! I thought your poem was wondrously written, such sadness portrayed but ending with a humorous hope! What a fantastic piece, Great Work!!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/3/2017 8:58:00 AM
Love your comments my friend Russell--you are so kind--many thanks!

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