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Love Story

Love Story Oh, how I remember days full of ardent cheer Enamored in prospects of romance so sincere! Believing love so precious would never end Floating on emotions that eagerly befriend. Despair then ravished my young tender heart And all my aspirations suddenly blew apart. He never told me what caused him to flee, Walking out of my life without even telling me. How gullible of me to believe untruths he said Letting him seduce love, taking me for granted. Gladly you found me when I was hopeless wreck, As shattered dreams trailed a tragic heartbreak. Now I adore how you hug me with gentle care, Approaching me softly with a joy of teasing dare, Loving me deeply like no one has ever before, Embarking on a journey our love would explore. Your loving hands hold me as if a delicate flower, As you surrender tenderly like you wish to cower, Whispering as a moth whirling breeze of fresh air, Burning my flame eminently with a loving flare. Then we travelled to vistas of kingdom unseen, A paradise of enduring love fit for king and queen, There I surrendered me as you fondly appealed As union of our anxious desires eagerly fulfilled. Now as you contemplate pending wedding bells I'm desolate to admit what my wary heart foretells, My sweet love I regret deeply how this will end As I have fallen in love with your sexy best-friend. First Place November 3, 2017 Love Story Sponsor: Silent One
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George Avatar
July 8, 2022 at 6:32 AM
A great love poem which I have been reading enjoying the flow of emotions, its sweet rhythm and passionate intensity written in your innate flair for language. But the twist at the end is disheartening !
Salehi Avatar
November 6, 2017 at 2:17 AM
Great Poem Vijay... The only thing that we need is MORE love..
Pandit Avatar
November 6, 2017 at 6:29 AM
Thank you Pashang!
Fleming Avatar
November 5, 2017 at 11:24 AM
Love the twist at the end -- accomplished with great cunning and skill! Excellent poem, Vijay. My best regards. :) john
Pandit Avatar
November 6, 2017 at 6:28 AM
Thank you john!
Pett Avatar
November 5, 2017 at 10:09 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win Vijay, great poem and brilliant twist, excellent. :))
Pandit Avatar
November 6, 2017 at 6:28 AM
Thank you Roy!
Ashley Avatar
November 5, 2017 at 9:32 AM
Vijay, such a sensuous love poem so wondrously written in beautiful rhythm and rhyme and great content.., love's tragic twist at the end was deftly expressed... rebound relationships never end happily.., sigh.., poor guy :( Congratulations on your first place win!!
Pandit Avatar
November 6, 2017 at 6:28 AM
Thank you Susan!
Gauthier Avatar
November 5, 2017 at 8:44 AM
That's quite the twist ! Well written. Congrats on your win, Vijay.
Pandit Avatar
November 6, 2017 at 6:27 AM
Thank you Line!
One Avatar
November 5, 2017 at 7:11 AM
You naughty boy! lol! The master of rhyme has done it again... Congratulations on your first place in the contest..
Pandit Avatar
November 6, 2017 at 6:27 AM
Thank you Silent One!
Sinha-Roy Avatar
November 5, 2017 at 6:39 AM
Congratulation on your win, Vijay with a nice poem ending in suspense.
Pandit Avatar
November 6, 2017 at 6:27 AM
Thank you Subimal!
Robinson Jr. Avatar
November 4, 2017 at 11:14 AM
What a surprise ending, Vijay! Still, this is one great romantic poem. I was so into the spirit of love flowing throughout this gorgeous poem, until her wandering eyes went looking elsewhere. Bummer dude. You gave us such a delicious enchilada, but took away the spicy ranchero sauce. You a bad man ... lol! Great poem though. Love and smiles always.
Pandit Avatar
November 4, 2017 at 12:53 PM
Thanks Freddie!
Delaney Avatar
November 4, 2017 at 7:12 AM
Excellent entry, Vijay: We all love a surprise ending. Good Luck in the contest. SuZ
Pandit Avatar
November 4, 2017 at 7:13 AM
Thank you suZ.
Dietrich Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 5:55 PM
oh wow, you really got me at the end. GREAT twist and cool story, Vijay!!
Pandit Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 6:31 PM
Thank you Andrea!
Andresen Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 3:47 PM
- Vijay, I love this story ... really wonderful written - Best wishes in the contest ... and a lovely weekend ... take care of the love :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Pandit Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 4:27 PM
Thank you Anne-Lise--appreciate your comments--happy weekend to you as well!
Onclaud Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 2:29 PM
vijay, what a twist...ohh,a delightful poem.. you are a bag of surprises; very nice!..huggs
Pandit Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 4:26 PM
Thank you nette, appreciate your comments!
Mccall Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 9:11 AM
Such a beautiful poem Vijay you write so well. your ending was quite a surprise I didn’t see that coming. We’ll done!
Pandit Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 1:27 PM
Thank you Edward--appreciate your comments!
Sands Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 8:21 AM
Wow Vijay , that was a surprise ending! This is well written with so many good lines. I like the line ..whispering as a moth whirling breeze of fresh air. ! Good luck in the contest :)
Pandit Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 9:02 AM
I'm always so happy to read your comments--many thanks for the insights in your thoughts here, and in your poems!
Trifiatis Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 8:12 AM
"The heart has its reasons that reason doesn't understand " J. J. Rousseau! Well, c'est la vie mon ami, Vijay! Hahaha! Wonderfully done!
Pandit Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 9:00 AM
What a wonderful quote, my friend--you are always inspiring--many thanks!
Rodrigues Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 7:43 AM
Screaming at the end! What a turn of events! GL in contest!
Pandit Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 8:58 AM
Appreciate your comments Kim--many thanks!
Sivey Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 7:38 AM
Aw, I love the ending, "...As I have fallen in love with your sexy best-friend," such an awesome line! You made me laugh by this ending, but it's so true, it happens all the time! And sometimes they end up getting married, putting a strain on the friendship of both people! I thought your poem was wondrously written, such sadness portrayed but ending with a humorous hope! What a fantastic piece, Great Work!!
Pandit Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 8:58 AM
Love your comments my friend Russell--you are so kind--many thanks!
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