Andrea Dietrich Poet Sonnet

Love Sonnet

I love you! Your flowered eyes get bright
To see me simply walk into a room.
They follow me and keep me in their sight.
How I adore those pretty eyes in bloom.

My love, words uttered from your perfect lips
are precious pearls, fair treasures from the sea.
Each syllable in honeyed cadence drips
a nectar which is sustenance for me.

My love, you are the moon and stars to me.
I’m mellowed by your aura’s softened glow.
There is no other face I long to see.
Come lie beside me now the lights are low.

This night with you I have been dreaming of.
Let's make of this sweet night a dream, my love.


March 6, 2018 Now for Heidi Sands' Love Poem Contest

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Anisha Dutta April 28, 2016 at 1:25 PM Good to write n rewrite. Congrats to win

Chris Hagy April 15, 2016 at 7:17 PM Beautiful write Andrea... I hope it's ok if I really like the original version.

Vera Duggan April 3, 2016 at 2:09 AM Hi Andrea, wow that is one long sonnet but I must say a beautiful one, congrat's on the win you certainly deserve it, take care....Vera Vera Duggan April 6, 2016 at 12:04 AM So sorry Andrea but I was so in the moment of reading it and with the beautiful flow I didn't realise it was two, once again I am so sorry......Take care......Vera Andrea Dietrich April 3, 2016 at 12:30 PM it seems long because it is two separate sonnets.

Teddy Kimathi March 31, 2016 at 4:41 AM Congrats Andrea, for your beautiful WIN with this masterpiece!!! ;-)

Pashang Salehi March 30, 2016 at 10:43 PM Sonnetier or Ghazalier! Your LOVE speaks in many different forms.

Balveen Cheema March 30, 2016 at 12:21 PM Congrats Andrea for your win! Passions overflowing...

Hansteven Selfa March 30, 2016 at 8:55 AM Congratulations Andrea on your breathtaking win! You are truly a matchless poet! :) -HANS

Dr. Upma A. Sharma March 30, 2016 at 1:21 AM Wonderful poetry n win Andrea.. big congrats!

Daniel Turner March 29, 2016 at 7:57 PM Congratulations, Andrea on your placement in the contest. I'm like John. I prefer the original thought. Peace my friend:)

Beautiful Scars March 29, 2016 at 7:06 PM Andrea, congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo

John Lawless March 29, 2016 at 6:51 PM Andrea, I very much like "the original written very quickly). I guess the "first flush of feeling" that came through in reading it and its quiet cadence captured me. The revision, though well conceived, seems to lack the passion of the original. Thanks for participating in the contest.

Bl Devnath March 28, 2016 at 10:14 AM Very nice revision for nice contest. Good luck sure my lovely friend. Loved always, bl

Jill Spagnola March 28, 2016 at 9:46 AM Best of luck Andrea...your piece is lovely and I appreciate your grasp of this form that eludes my brain wiring:)..lovely, jill

Anne-Lise Andresen March 28, 2016 at 4:42 AM - Is it you who have written both of them, Andrea? - Very beautiful and romantic both of them :) - Luck in contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Matthew Anish March 27, 2016 at 10:17 PM Very romantic! Good luck in the contest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Tim Smith March 27, 2016 at 9:36 PM Line 11 Tim Smith March 28, 2016 at 8:53 AM Let me work on it. I'm at the grocery store now. When I first read I was thinking sweeter. Andrea Dietrich March 28, 2016 at 8:45 AM Can you think of a spicy line? I am brain dead this morning. hahaha

Tim Smith March 27, 2016 at 8:59 PM I love a romantic sonnet Andrea, I really like how you started each stanza with my love and ended the final couplet with it as well. I might look for another word instead of "other" to spice up that line a bit if you are planning on revising. Andrea Dietrich March 27, 2016 at 9:34 PM where is the word "other" you want me to substitute for something else? I don't see it.