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Love So Shallow

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Sample for English sonnet contest.

Love so shallow

I am, what I am, just a humble man
You are a star, seen only from afar
With furtive glances, I devised a plan
Your eyes told me, your love's door was ajar

I dipped my toes into love's shallow stream
Your heart opened wide as oceans so deep
Surprised, I dove into this hallowed dream
I thought destiny planned a love to keep

Slowly, but surely, love turned nonchalant
For you, love was, just a game of flirting
You were, ev'rything, I could ever want
My pure heart was left shattered and hurting

From now on, I will be an ascetic
Will your thoughts of me be sympathetic?


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Required words: Ascetic, Humble, Furtive, Nonchalant, Shallow

John Derek Hamilton
January 15,2018

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Robert Lindley

Date: 3/12/2018 6:43:00 AM

Superb sonnet my friend. I have myself been a victim of such deceit but such learning experiences are a part of life, tho' a very bitter lesson to learn... A fav....

John Hamilton
Date: 3/12/2018 11:02:00 AM

Thanks Robert, I think a lot of us have experienced this, unfortunately loyalty comes at a premium these days. Thanks for your kind visit and the fave!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/19/2018 7:08:00 PM

oh it's a good thing I came and saw this. I almost entered a sonnet that did not use your five words!! GREAT example for us, John. I'm happy you enjoy sonnets.

John Hamilton
Date: 1/20/2018 1:40:00 PM

Thanks Andrea, looking forward to your entry!