Love Smoke

I draw you in Five rings of smoke appear like magic Your face on every one Christ how romantic am I Maybe drink a JD in your honour It's amazing how little things bring you to me The phone comes alive halfway through your honour Your soft sexy voice sends a tingle down my spine You say it's over Well, that was out of the blue I draw you in The sign on the packet Smoking can damage your health and eventually kill you So profound I check the bottle of JD No warning on that You disappear into the clouds Every one a silver lining.

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Suzette Richards

Date: 4/22/2023 2:14:00 AM

Lost in the arms of Jack Daniels ... Congratulations on your placement, Paul.

Paul Bell
Date: 4/22/2023 2:45:00 AM

Do you think that's how JD came about.

Di11y Da11y

Date: 4/21/2023 8:21:00 AM

This is brilliant! So cool. Definitely imagining some kind of James Dean double saying this :)

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/22/2023 2:49:00 PM

Yes, I freefall then float regularly - signature style

Paul Bell
Date: 4/22/2023 2:45:00 AM

I think you're right, you doing okay.

I Am Anaya

Date: 4/21/2023 8:10:00 AM

Congratulations on your win! Titles that make one curious, as usual, Paul. I entered mine, and it was a new poem, glad she picked yours!~Anaya

Paul Bell
Date: 4/22/2023 2:44:00 AM

I think Charlotte should discard mine for not reading the rules probably, but you're still a winner.

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 4/21/2023 8:08:00 AM

now you're very naughty because i had specified new poems only lol i see i've already commented on it - i thought it seemed familiar! nothing more to say that i haven't already - except congrats on your cheeky win in my contest! :)

Paul Bell
Date: 4/22/2023 2:42:00 AM

You know I don't read the small print. lol. I couldn't even see how you put your own contest up.

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 1/5/2023 8:19:00 AM

another very good poem; a nice wrap-up in the last two lines, and i like the title..a happy new year to you too lol

Paul Bell
Date: 1/5/2023 8:27:00 AM

She married that other guy, silly woman. lol

Elizabeth Mccann

Date: 1/4/2023 12:28:00 PM

Nicely rounded off in the last verse! I like the idea of "no warning on the JD! Elizabeth

Paul Bell
Date: 1/5/2023 2:38:00 AM

I think he did too.