Love Haiku

first light rain - slippery is the path of fragile love ~~~~~~~~~~~~ A Hi-Ku (6) Contest Sponsor: Brian Strand Placed 1st Posted Jan 2021

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Lisa Ricci

Date: 4/12/2024 8:06:00 AM

Good Morning Paul. How very true. May all know of love even through the rain and love's slippery path. It was a pleasure turning to this entry. Have a wonderful day and weekend. I hope all is well. Peace and Blessings always (smile)

Paul Callus
Date: 4/14/2024 1:15:00 AM

Thank you, Lisa; always a pleasure to have you visiting :) Happy weekend& blessings, my friend // paul

Line Gauthier

Date: 3/22/2021 9:10:00 PM

Bravo ~ congrats on your well deserved win, Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 4/2/2021 6:53:00 AM

Thank you, Line. Pls excuse my late reply (see my note to Eileen). Hope you are keeping well, my friend. Warm regards // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/5/2021 7:37:00 AM

Slippery... indeed. Lovely write.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/2/2021 6:51:00 AM

Thank you, Eileen. Excuse the very belated reply, but for along time I was not receiving any notifications; came across this comment of yours by accident! Take care my friend. Hugs // paul

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 1/27/2021 6:36:00 PM

Congratulations! That's a great haiku - well-deserved the honour. Best wishes ~ Mala

Paul Callus
Date: 2/6/2021 2:23:00 PM

Thank you so much, Mala. Pleased you enjoyed it. Best regards // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 1/26/2021 12:39:00 PM

lol, such truth here, my friend. I hope all is well with you : )

Paul Callus
Date: 2/6/2021 2:16:00 PM

Thank you, Jack. Life is somewhat busy at present, but coping. Regards // paul

Angela Crabtree

Date: 1/22/2021 12:29:00 PM

Back to read this again, Paul. The way you write is incredible. You say so much with so little. Hope you have a great weekend :)

Paul Callus
Date: 1/24/2021 1:24:00 PM

A double thank you for a double visit, Angela :) truly appreciated. Regards // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 1/22/2021 10:14:00 AM

Paul, you are always clever with your words in poetry and their meaning - careful this love is fragile, almost the same as walking on a wet slippery path. Wonderful Haiku. Hugs warm regards and blessings, Jenny.

Paul Callus
Date: 1/24/2021 2:51:00 PM

As usual your feedback is lovely to read, Jenny...thank you. Hope you had a relaxing weekend. Warm regards & hugs // paul

Judy Ball

Date: 1/17/2021 5:13:00 PM

So true Paul. Well said. God Bless, JB

Paul Callus
Date: 1/19/2021 12:34:00 PM

Thank you, Judy. Blessings // paul

Akkina Downing

Date: 1/16/2021 7:57:00 PM

This is so true and so beautifully written. And not surprised it's a winner. Congrats my friend :)

Paul Callus
Date: 1/17/2021 7:30:00 AM

Thank you dear Akkina; your lovely comments and congrats are appreciated. Warm regards // paul

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 1/16/2021 6:31:00 AM

Lovely write. I enjoyed it. God bless you always

Paul Callus
Date: 1/17/2021 7:19:00 AM

Glad you enjoyed it, Regina...thank you. Blessings & regards // paul

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 1/16/2021 6:13:00 AM

Ah, you make me want to go out and do a pirouette in the rain with my silk slippers Paul, hope your keeping well, and that God is granting you His benevolent protection, until this is over, we need to stay strong. All the best.

Paul Callus
Date: 1/17/2021 7:19:00 AM

Enjoy your pirouettes, Vienna, but don't overdo it...it could be slippery out there :) Yes, Divine protection will go a long way in keeping us free from danger. Hope you are keeping well, my friend. Tanti auguri per il nuovo anno!! Ciao /x/ paul

Eve Roper

Date: 1/15/2021 7:20:00 PM

Great imagery , Paul. Hugs Eve

Paul Callus
Date: 1/17/2021 7:12:00 AM

Thank you, Eve. Regards & Hugs // paul

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/15/2021 3:29:00 PM

Back with congrats on your top win, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 1/17/2021 7:07:00 AM

Thank you, Vijay. Best regards // paul

FJ Thomas

Date: 1/15/2021 12:59:00 PM

So very true my friend. Beautiful Paul :)

Paul Callus
Date: 1/17/2021 7:07:00 AM

Thank you, Flo :) Always a pleasure to have you stopping by, my friend. Regards // paul

David Mohn

Date: 1/14/2021 12:36:00 PM

wonderful Paul...you created a beauty here :)

Paul Callus
Date: 1/16/2021 7:01:00 AM

Thank you, David; your lovely comments are appreciated. Regards // paul

Leon Enriquez

Date: 1/14/2021 12:13:00 PM

Dear Paul: Nicely done with a touch of finesse my friend. How are you in Malta? I’ve been away from Poetry Soup for about 9 months. Needed time to focus on my Very Very Short Stories. Now I am back with my daily writes and posts. All the best to you. Leon

Paul Callus
Date: 1/16/2021 7:00:00 AM

Hi Leon!! I was wandering what had become of you!! So pleased to see you back in high spirits. Thank you for stopping by, my friend. Best regards for the new year. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 1/11/2021 1:22:00 PM

Dropping back with many congrats on your top spot Paul;-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 1/16/2021 6:58:00 AM

Thank you Jan. Have a lovely weekend, even though lockdowns do not allow much to be done outside the house. Hugs // paul

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 1/11/2021 10:52:00 AM

Hello Paul Callus, this lovely. i did not know that a Haiku can be written in a romantic way. Love is wonderful when it goes right. Regards Darlene

Paul Callus
Date: 1/16/2021 6:45:00 AM

Yes, it can be, Darlene; as you can see it was based on a nature prompt (the 1st line). Thank you for a lovely visit. Regards // paul

Brandy Nicole

Date: 1/10/2021 8:35:00 PM

Love is like a slippery path, after a gentle rain. Tender thoughts indeed. You certainly have a way of caressing the moment, with only a small amount of words. I am in complete awe. This is beautiful and emotional, all at the same time. Many wonderful blessings to you. :) Hugs, Brandy

Paul Callus
Date: 1/15/2021 11:22:00 AM

Thank you so much, Brandy. I love your feedback and complimentary remarks:) If I may say so, you too are capable of saying a lot without needing to write at length:) Hope the new year will provide all you wish for. ~ Regards & Hugs // paul

Alexis Y.

Date: 1/10/2021 5:17:00 PM

Hi Paul, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your winning write. Have a great day:-) Alexis

Paul Callus
Date: 1/15/2021 11:45:00 AM

Thank you, Alexis. I'm still having technical problems, but I am pleased to find that now I'm able to comment on your poems. Warm regards // paul

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/10/2021 3:23:00 PM

So well said, Paul--enjoyed the metaphoric write.

Paul Callus
Date: 1/15/2021 11:46:00 AM

Thank you, Vijay. Hope that so far 2021 is treating you well, my friend. Regards // paul

Angela Crabtree

Date: 1/10/2021 2:36:00 PM

Another wonderful write, Paul. Saved to read again :)

Paul Callus
Date: 1/15/2021 2:42:00 PM

That is very lovely of you, Angela :) Thank you. Hope you are keeping well. Regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/10/2021 2:16:00 PM

Ah, the first sign of trouble in a relationship shows us just how fragile love truly is, Paul. Excellent haiku! A fave for me. Hugs, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 1/15/2021 2:21:00 PM

Well said, Carolyn! Thank you for the feedback and lovely comments...and the fav! Hope you're keeping well and safe, my friend. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 1/10/2021 1:11:00 PM

oh so true Paul! Happy new year to you and your lovely family... we are in lockdown as we now have the virus in the community, everyone is adapting very well (after the initial 3 days of panic buying) i finally got bread as the shelves had been stripped like frenzied pirhanas - i think there's go to be a poem for me to write about that lol:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 1/10/2021 1:47:00 PM

Unfortunately the virus found its way there, too. You will soon get used to the situation, but panic buying would get to me. Our positive cases (and deaths) keep increasing. Some people are being given the vaccine, but the process is very slow. Take care. regards to all. Hugs // paul

Alexis Y.

Date: 1/10/2021 1:11:00 PM

Hi Paul, This is a good entry for the contest.It looks like a winner to me. Best wishes in the contest- Have a great day, my friend:-)Alexis

Paul Callus
Date: 1/10/2021 1:30:00 PM

I have just read some of your latest lovely poems, Alexis, but unfortunately I cannot leave comments. Hope all is well. Take care. ~ paul

Paul Callus
Date: 1/10/2021 1:24:00 PM

Hi Alexis. Thank you for the faith you show in this wee poem.:) I've been having technical problems with Soup; also not receiving any notifications. Hope you've been having a lovely weekend, my friend. ~ Regards // paul