Love At Twilight

How large the pearlescent sun seems today.
Yet it is dying, its flaming rays ineffective.
After a long hot day, tired, it must be spent.
So patiently it descends out of humanity’s vista,
Far across the sea, behind the shimmering horizon.
We enjoyed the calm stillness of eventide.

Quietly the moon takes its rightful place. 
Shining in a wan mysterious way,
Night intensifies as stars twinkle all around,
Above gardens plumb in the middle of the vale.
How we adored the perfume of so many flowers,
Especially the crimped fuchsia edged white star flowers.

The moon lightening effulgently the rugged paths
Of the mysterious countryside around,
Fragrance everywhere with a gentle tang.

On mountains far away feral dogs howling their random growl,
While countless cicadas commence their orchestrated song, 
Hell bent on mating before their adulation time is up.

It is good we need have no hurry, dear,
So, we can relish our time together.
With a small mandolin I thrum a love song,
As we huddle close under the banyan tree,
Fireflies dance their intricate dance.
I snuggle my head against your soft cheeks.
How smooth and pleasant it can be,
As our lips meet and savour our delight.
Dreaming of our future and days to come. 

16 March  2021

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Goldsmith Avatar
April 19, 2021 at 11:34 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a creative story/write. Love your line, "Dreaming of our future and days to come." Good dreams are the best. Have a blessed day.......................
Roper Avatar
April 18, 2021 at 7:25 PM
Back with congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve
Hamilton Avatar
April 18, 2021 at 4:37 PM
A wonderful write and entry, congrats Victor on a nice win!
Roper Avatar
March 19, 2021 at 7:20 PM
Great use of the words for John's, contest. Good luck. :)
Marcum Wong Avatar
March 17, 2021 at 4:00 PM
Your poem is stunning Victor! I loved it! The photo reminds me of home here in Hawaii. I wish you a Happy St. Patrick's Day, belated because of our time change. Blessings xxoo
Edmonds  Avatar
March 17, 2021 at 1:50 PM
So beautiful and romantic Victor. Just love that magnificent tree... Belle
Downing  Avatar
March 17, 2021 at 11:01 AM
Absolutely gorgeous!! I love love it :)
Y. Avatar
March 17, 2021 at 9:27 AM
WoW! Victor, You did a great job with the chosen words. You made this contest challenge look easy; however, I know it was not. Best wishes in the contest. Excellent job:-)Alexis
Rodrigues Avatar
March 17, 2021 at 4:25 AM
A lovely day and night spent together. A lovely way to use your 8 words, my friend!
Daniel Avatar
March 16, 2021 at 9:01 PM
Brilliance shines in every line, Victor, a romantic winner for me:)
Dietrich Avatar
March 16, 2021 at 4:34 PM
gorgeous writing. You always do so well with free verse.
Milgate Avatar
March 16, 2021 at 1:13 PM
How lovely!!
Buehler Avatar
March 16, 2021 at 12:13 PM
You have imagined the perfect evening, Victor. It is the kind that is made for romance. I see a winner here. Beautiful! :=)
May Avatar
March 16, 2021 at 11:01 AM
You used the words well Victor, Very nicely penned..
Pandit Avatar
March 16, 2021 at 6:42 AM
A story beautifully woven, Victor....a joy to take a trip with you in your imagery. Every scene comes alive--masterfully done, as always. No doubt a winning poem.
Kendrick Avatar
March 16, 2021 at 5:56 AM
Good use of the required words. Enjoyed reading your contest entry. The tree in the picture is very interesting. It seems like one that would offer a very good shade. Thanks for your visit to my page. Sara
Ball Avatar
March 16, 2021 at 4:27 AM
A beautifully worded romantic piece Victor. A winner for sure. God Bless, JB
Andresen Avatar
March 16, 2021 at 3:32 AM
- Gorgeous poem, Victor :) - The words that were the challenge ... you gave them a romantic sound ... impressively done :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - Have a lovely day :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Cunningham Avatar
March 16, 2021 at 2:57 AM
Very creative Victor, you wove the allocated words well into your verse. Best of luck in the contest Tom
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