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Love and Triumph (Please Critique This Poem)

How much I love you. It's easy to describe. My feelings are as strong as the movement of a fierce earthquake. You have captured my heart with your strong hands and eyes. My love for you has lingered for as long as I can remember, my love's deep. I know my feelings are true. Why can't you love like that? I think my day has come. I saw you looking at me, with your big, beautiful brown eyes. You came towards me and planted a big kiss. My love has been rewarded. (I wrote this poem when I was in the 10th grade. I know the poem is patterned after a poem called Martial Choreograph that was written by Maya Angelou. Does anybody know what type of poem it was?)

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Date: 10/13/2008 2:45:00 PM
I believe it's Kryeille. Beautiful write Michael
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