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Lost World

MODERN HAIKU nature looming in dark choking ice dust heaven earth worlds cauterized black trees barren childless dead before time erased time burnt blood dehydrated

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/23/2013 6:55:00 AM

Congratulations on having your poem featured on the soups home page. Take care and enjoy the coming week. ~XOX~ *LINDA

Daver Austin

Date: 6/19/2013 9:18:00 AM

Nuclear, eh? Congrats on the selection. Love, daver

Kash Poet

Date: 2/5/2011 10:39:00 PM

Hey I just copied those words(salamat din sa yo)from Nikko's comment below. I Don't know the meaning!

Kash Poet

Date: 2/5/2011 11:44:00 AM

Nice imagery here! salamat din sa 'yo :) ha ha--kashinath

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/8/2010 9:44:00 AM

apocalytical!! somehow I like the consept of haiku as beauty, prayer, meditation...I do LIKE your verse I am with Chris ckoka LOL or "haiku's evil twin?" LOL Great images strong write, just teasing about the form title me and Chris love to talk! HUGS Light & Love

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/8/2010 12:13:00 AM

happy you liked this one, andrea.. thanks for the encouragement! warmest, nette

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/7/2010 7:04:00 PM

HI, Nette. YOu painted a dire picture here. Love that line "dead before time erased time." What does this mean modernized haiku. I always thought haiku were only three lines. Anyway, it was an enjoyable read! Luv, Andrea

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/6/2010 1:57:00 PM

nilcole , a pleasant remark from you made my day! with much thanks! warmest, nette

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/6/2010 1:55:00 PM

naku, katuwa naman ang siulat mo.. thanks again for dropping by and sharing your thought here... more power to you, nikko.. warmest, nette

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 11/6/2010 10:20:00 AM

very vivid piece you have here, Nette :) really enjoyed reading this one--each line sure brings strong images to mind-- and yup definitely happy to see another Pinoy here -- yup sulatan kita pagkatapos ko basahin iba mo pang tula, ok :) salamat din sa 'yo :) --nikko :)

Nicole Sharon Brown

Date: 11/6/2010 8:12:00 AM

i love this! Great write!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/6/2010 2:29:00 AM

hi chris... thank you for your lovely comment... i'm not poetry guru but let me share what i personally understand. a modern haiku need not follow the usually structured 5-7-5 method though the" haiku" essence is there.. a choka contains a longer form with a somehow similar haku meter... this haiku i did is a double one, so i think.. lol, i'm beginning to sound like a prof who is sounding nutty! just the ame, i wish you the best here in p soup! warmest, nette

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/5/2010 9:06:00 AM

nice to hear from you, robert... thanks for your generous reply!! all the best warmest, nette

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/5/2010 9:04:00 AM

you got my drift carolyn.. i'm more of a free spirited scribber though i kinda get a liking for the metered ones when in the mood ;) ... love your insights on this! see you on your street soon! warmest, nette

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 11/5/2010 7:19:00 AM

You used the "modern haiku" very well, Nette. Too often we feel confined by that three-line 5-7-5 syllable scheme. The image you create of winter is chilling and really outstanding. Love, Carolyn

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 11/5/2010 5:02:00 AM

I am not familiar with this style Haiku but you certainly have succeded in painting a stark and dark picture void of hope and future! Well described..