Lost

Lost in a sea of numbness forgetting for days, hours, minutes until memory bursts. smell, sounds, the gray clouds on a dreary day They bring back you your perfume advice-- both sought and not the color of your eyes I hear your voice and again I am Lost in a deluge of pain remembering you're gone now no hour long calls when you're minutes away No smiles because I'm yours no you and I'm Lost.

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Aidan Gilbert

Date: 6/26/2015 8:37:00 AM

beautiful

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 7/2/2015 7:54:00 PM

Thank you Aidan. Welcome to my pages. JANET

Thomas Martin

Date: 5/4/2015 5:55:00 PM

Been there; done that over a girl! Glad I am too old now for all but dreaming! Like your free verse very much!

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 5/4/2015 6:56:00 PM

This was actually written after my mother's death, but I left it so it was a bit more general, and others could relate. Thanks for putting overtime into my work today!! ~Jan

Logan Holliday

Date: 4/7/2015 4:25:00 PM

Absolutely heart breaking... My thoughts go to you and whatever you may be overcoming. beautiful write- Logan

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 4/7/2015 6:51:00 PM

Thank you so much Logan. This was written after the death of my mother.

Cynthia Jones

Date: 4/6/2015 1:53:00 PM

Janet, this is such a sad write. Your mother will always live on inside you. Well done. :O) Keep up with the great work. Keep on penning. Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us. We all truly appreciate it. *S* Cynthia

Cynthia Jones
Date: 4/13/2015 6:21:00 PM

You are most welcome Janet. I don't blame you for being upset. It would be hard to deal with. *S* Cynthia

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 4/7/2015 6:51:00 PM

Thanks you so much. I'm having to deal with her estate and that has made the grieving process a bit harder, because I slip into anger over and over that she left things a mess.

Rightly Jennings

Date: 4/3/2015 10:14:00 AM

Poetry of a heart broken. Very moving. Stunning.

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 4/3/2015 11:44:00 PM

Thank you for commenting and reading ..be by soon.

Paul Schneiter

Date: 3/14/2015 7:52:00 AM

This poem powerfully communicates the emotions one feels over a lost relationship. I think it's exceptionally well written. Kudos!

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 3/21/2015 12:08:00 PM

Thanks Paul. Grief is universal whether its through death or the break in a relationship. I'm glad you found this expression o mine well-written.

Njeri Hunjeri

Date: 3/13/2015 9:19:00 PM

Heartfelt. Losing is tough. Be blessed.

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 3/21/2015 12:09:00 PM

Thanks for reading and blessings to you.

Jan Allison

Date: 3/5/2015 6:15:00 PM

I can relate to this having just lost my father:-) sso difficult to deal with loss of any sort either by death or the ending of a relationship :-( Hugs Jan xx

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 3/9/2015 9:05:00 AM

Jan loss is loss. This was written after the loss of my mother. She was my cornerstone for many years. Thanks for the comment and the hugs.

Skat A

Date: 2/15/2015 9:47:00 AM

Janet :) Congratulations on having your awesome poem featured on the soups Home Page. Hope you had a wonderful Valentines day. ~SKAT LOVE~

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 2/18/2015 6:43:00 PM

Thanks. It was a busy weekend, and Wow, I'd never thought I'd end up with a featured poem so quickly!

Paul Callus

Date: 2/6/2015 6:02:00 PM

Lovely and yet so sad, Janet. Loss leaves emptiness in our lives which will always be hard to fill. Take care. // paul

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 2/10/2015 3:44:00 PM

Thanks for the comments on "Lost". It's odd that the two poems posted close together had such different origins. Didn't realize than until I looked at the new posts.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/25/2015 12:51:00 AM

Hi Janet, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun in this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets, who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I want to be the first to invite you on over to the contest page. I OFFER MY CONTEST in hopes it inspires you in some way. I will enjoy following you and your poetry:) This is a great way to start the New Year. Lucky Us, To Have you. Enjoy 2015, with New Poet Friends! @-> LINDA <-@

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 1/27/2015 6:13:00 PM

Linda, Thank you for the welcome. I'll get by soon! I love contest and challenges. some of my best poems come from them. My old site does not have many active members anymore, so getting serious critique is difficult. Been busy this week but will get to you this weekend. ~jan

Skat A

Date: 1/24/2015 6:16:00 AM

Janet, Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. I will get much delight, in reading and in time become familiar with your verse. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile, others passed, when I first join the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poet's around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 1/27/2015 6:15:00 PM

SKAT, Thanks for the reply and the warm welcome. I will get to your page this weekend. This week I've been slammed with meetings at work and community activities that I help organize. I'm excited to meet so many people. Can't wait to come read and comment!

Daver Austin

Date: 1/23/2015 11:22:00 AM

Hi. "Your" signifies possession. Don't you want you're in these cases. Hey, just being a real jerk. Thanks for reading my stuff and for this good effort of yours. Love, daver

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 1/23/2015 11:44:00 AM

Found it! Usually much better at checking these things. Thanks for reading and I never mind critique. I have been in groups that take it apart line by line...LOL. Poetry Soup has gone easy on me so far

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/22/2015 5:01:00 AM

- Hey Janet, nice to read your first poem - Welcome to P - Soup !! - Hope to read many more poems from you in the future - // Anne-Lise :)

James Ranahan

Date: 1/21/2015 11:04:00 PM

Your poem tells a story. I hope you continue to think like a poet. Keep writing a lot. Jim

Ty Townsend

Date: 1/21/2015 8:16:00 PM

I liked the emotion displayed in your poem. It's always a tragedy to have that empty feeling when you lose someone. Well-written!