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Loss

sat by your bedside praying for a miracle ~ you breathed your last breath
Written 23 July 2020 For writing challenge haiku or senyru poetry contest Sponsored by Constance La France.
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Shaw Avatar
August 7, 2020 at 8:13 PM
A hand shared, is a hand that cared, sadder, are those who leave alone . . . : (
Cunningham Avatar
August 8, 2020 at 2:08 AM
Thank you Indiana, love that quote. Hope you're well Tom
Gauthier Avatar
August 2, 2020 at 4:57 AM
Powerful. Congrats on your well deserved top win, Tom.
Cunningham Avatar
August 2, 2020 at 5:01 AM
Thank you Line, a sad scene that I know many of us have experienced. Tom
La France Avatar
July 29, 2020 at 4:48 PM
Tom, congratulations on your win in my senryu contest with this excellent and emotional write, a FAV for me and a great image too _Constance
Cunningham Avatar
July 30, 2020 at 12:50 AM
Thank you very much Constance, it was inspired from a real experience that im sure many others share, thanks for the fav and for hosting. Tom
Mishra Avatar
July 28, 2020 at 12:00 PM
This is so touching and sad Tom! Yet you leave the footprints of your tender emotions in such few words. Congratulations on your win! :)
Cunningham Avatar
July 28, 2020 at 1:08 PM
Thank you very much Aditi, I know it is something that we all dread when we are with loved ones at the end. Tom
Tor Avatar
July 27, 2020 at 12:36 PM
Congratulations Tom...
Cunningham Avatar
July 27, 2020 at 12:46 PM
Thank you very much Michael. Tom
Deepa Avatar
July 27, 2020 at 1:07 AM
Back to you with my heartily Congratulations Tom sir:-)Keep inspiring.Warmest regards:-)
Cunningham Avatar
July 27, 2020 at 2:22 AM
Thank you very much Deepa. Enjoy the week ahead. Tom
Somadas Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 10:25 PM
Sad and touching Senryu.. Congrats on your great win Tom..
Cunningham Avatar
July 27, 2020 at 2:21 AM
Thank you Jenish Tom
Dietrich Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 7:30 PM
This one is so memorable. Back with my congrats
Cunningham Avatar
July 27, 2020 at 2:21 AM
Thank you very much Andrea Tom
Roper Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 3:55 PM
Back with congratulations on your win with these beautiful Senryu. Hugs Eve
Cunningham Avatar
July 27, 2020 at 2:21 AM
Thank you Eve Tom
Allison Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 3:50 PM
such a touching piece Tom, many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Cunningham Avatar
July 27, 2020 at 2:20 AM
Thank you for congrats Jan Tom
Faulkner Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 3:19 PM
Congratulations on your win, Tom, this is so sad and moving-
Cunningham Avatar
July 27, 2020 at 2:19 AM
Thank you very much Michelle. Tom
Rodrigues Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 3:03 PM
Heartbreaking... Congratulations!
Cunningham Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 3:08 PM
Thank you very much Kim, Tom
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July 26, 2020 at 2:04 PM
You've described how it was when my father died, Tom. His children were all in his hospital room and I had my hand on his until the end. Congratulations on your win. You poem brought tears to my eyes. Hugs, Carolyn
Cunningham Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 2:46 PM
Thank you very much Carolyn, it's something that we've all experienced in our lives, and we wouldn't have it any other way, When I got the call that my dad was fading I got there half an hour too late, im glad though that the priest was with him when he passed. Tom
Callus Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 11:28 AM
Back with deserved congratulations on your fine win, Tom..Regards // paul
Cunningham Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 12:54 PM
Thank you very much Paul, Tom
Goldsmith Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 11:20 AM
Congratulations on your win. So sad but so true. A wonderful write. Enjoy your win and day.................
Cunningham Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 11:24 AM
Thank you very much Paula, a sad one I know, but its something we all go through. Tom
Andresen Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 11:17 AM
- Congratulations, Tom :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Cunningham Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 11:19 AM
Thank you very much for your return visit Anne. Tom
Andresen Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 6:11 AM
- A photograph similar to my father's and my hand ... and his last breath ... a sad moment, Tom - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Cunningham Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 7:45 AM
Thank you Anne, Thats something that sadly we all experience when we lose our loved ones, you know its coming but it is still a shock. Tom
Wolf Avatar
July 25, 2020 at 10:09 PM
Ooh, Tom, you've tugged at my heartstrings. So well-crafted a senryu. See you in the winner's circle with this one, friend! Thanks, Gershon
Cunningham Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 12:39 AM
Thank you Gershon, im happy you liked it. Tom
One Avatar
July 25, 2020 at 1:06 PM
A sad senryu... Been raining here too .
Cunningham Avatar
July 26, 2020 at 12:39 AM
Thank you S. O, sun came out at the end of the day, Tom
Canerdy Avatar
July 25, 2020 at 11:45 AM
Excellent senryu, Tom--poignant and moving. Janice
Cunningham Avatar
July 25, 2020 at 12:03 PM
Thank you very much Janice, im pleased you liked it. Tom
Mcconnell Avatar
July 25, 2020 at 11:04 AM
Very sad but well chosen words Tom, fine wording indeed. Hope all well have blessed weekend,Gordon
Cunningham Avatar
July 25, 2020 at 11:16 AM
Thank you Gordon, I hope you too are well, lots of rain today, could be worse I suppose, bit of rain never hurt anyone. Tom
Proxenos Avatar
July 25, 2020 at 6:15 AM
This Covid- 19 era will go down in History as one of the cruelest, nastiest virus's to hit planet earth, and I think we are not even 25% into it yet. Very sad write. Blessings
Cunningham Avatar
July 25, 2020 at 6:53 AM
Thank you Jennifer, you're right new infections springing up all over the place. Enjoy your weekend Tom
Roper Avatar
July 25, 2020 at 12:48 AM
Very touching poem, Tom, memories brought back. And very true emotion. Good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve
Cunningham Avatar
July 25, 2020 at 12:49 AM
Thank you very much Eve, its one we can all relate to. Tom
Dietrich Avatar
July 24, 2020 at 3:43 PM
a sad one, so poignant.
Cunningham Avatar
July 25, 2020 at 12:49 AM
Thank you Andrea Tom
Mcguire Avatar
July 24, 2020 at 3:38 PM
Been there a few time sadly good poem Tom
Cunningham Avatar
July 25, 2020 at 12:48 AM
Thank you very much Timothy, one of the hardest things to deal with. Tom
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