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Longingly Hankering

yearning 
              of ritual
      lethargic 
      in thunderstorm

      through 
     huge chasm 
   of window&
   watching 
   sky 
darkened &
drizzle 
dropping &
  gust 
howling 
 non-stop

yet stipulating
 coldness 
  within
  intimacy&
      a glimpse 
charming 
 longing 
for flowers 
blooming 
   rooting in 
    womb

 relishing 
drafting
  sun and moon

      elysian fields 
     of yesteryear
   & blue oceans
 crave 
scooting
 & 
alleging  
   obsession
    musings
    notification
  compelling

1St place contest winner

Written: August 1st, 2022

A Brian Strand Premiere Choice Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Brian Strand

NOTE:THIS IS AN OPEN(organic) FORM VERSE   using spaces&breaks without grammatical symbols ,the ' open' relies upon 'the one breath limitation' & so inherently requires the 'reader' (reciter) to input and responds thus making this enigmatic form a two way interplay & interpretatIon unique to the moment& changing according to mood is inherently variable.

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Silpika Kalita August 9, 2022 at 12:04 PM Belated congratulations for this aesthetic and creatively creative pragmatic share... Regards

Michael Tor August 7, 2022 at 9:56 PM What a great difficult form Lasaad that you have mastered congratulations on this magnificent Poetry of yours my friend.

Paula Goldsmith August 5, 2022 at 8:20 PM Congratulations on your trophy win. A great write. Love It. Have a wonderful/blessed weekend with your wonderful win.................

Paulette Calasibetta August 5, 2022 at 4:48 AM Congratulations on your 1st place win in the contest. Quite an interesting form....very unique! :)Paulette

Kim Rodrigues August 3, 2022 at 12:12 PM Congrats on your trophy win! Very nice!

Sam Kauffman August 3, 2022 at 10:54 AM Lasaad, congratulations on your trophy win with this most creative poetic form that is filled with dynamic imagery and energy like the storm! I agree with Greg when he says "knowing more forms makes a better poet." Thank you for your contribution to the poetry world! Blessings!

Greg Gaul August 3, 2022 at 9:53 AM If I have learned anything about poetry in recent years, it is that there is a form for everyone. I applaud your reaching out and stretching for something new. Knowing more forms makes the poet better, no doubt. Congratulations on your winning placement. Beating out Roy Boy is no easy task, I assure you. Enjoy.

Anisha Dutta August 3, 2022 at 9:36 AM Most Interesting Charming Style Big CONGRATS to win TOP. Blessings

Valsa George August 3, 2022 at 3:44 AM Congratulations on your trophy win dear friend ! I am so happy for you !

Andrea Dietrich August 2, 2022 at 1:31 PM Interesting form. I really like the pattern it creates.

Vijay Pandit August 2, 2022 at 6:22 AM Kudos to you my friend. You and Brian operate on same wavelength--you are now an expert on this form.

Victor Buhagiar August 2, 2022 at 1:16 AM That's how one feels when one is on a flight inn glory.

Valsa George August 1, 2022 at 9:49 PM This is indeed an engmatic form I am not able to grasp, but I know for sure these broken lines hold a violley of meanings ! All the Best in Brian's contest dear friend ! Valsa George August 3, 2022 at 3:50 AM Thank yu so much for your willingness to help me. Even if you try, I don't think I will be able to master this difficult form ! I am used to very simple way of writing.So please forget about it. Besides, my soupmail is not functional ..... Sotto Poet August 2, 2022 at 6:08 AM Your kind sentiments are very much appreciated, however, I was unable to send you an email about the subject. Could you kindly let me know if there are any other options? I would want to share some insight with you. I am certain that you will be capable of doing even more admirably than I have once you grasp it properly. Kindest regards dear friend.

Pashang Salehi August 1, 2022 at 5:57 PM I didn't get your heavenly yearning my friend, even though it's full of relishing words ... and I certainly do not get brian strand contests every other day... how can he do it?... have you read some of his writings? Pashang Salehi August 3, 2022 at 12:08 AM What a nice gentleman you are... Sotto Poet August 2, 2022 at 6:20 AM I am delighted to you, Pashang, for the kind words you have provided. If you keep reading Brian's poetry, I have no doubt that you will eventually be able to understand what they are trying to say. Also, give this organic form a go; you might end up comprehending what you're reading this time. There are no impossible tasks.