Longing To Perish

I feel the willows sway in the midst of my  b r o k e n  hearted moments,
I keel over on my pillow with fists clenched, unguarded lost in atonement.

After all was said and done your death threw my heart in the tumbled breeze,
after your soul bled you knew a fresh start wouldn't give your trouble ease.

Forgiven behavior releases a relinquished desire to keep on weeping,
I beg my Savior, "oh PLEASE! Extinguish my fire"…while you're left sleeping.

A thousandfold tears can’t even compare to all the craving salt I’ve cried,
I lay and hold your blanket in fear, if only I could’ve saved you from suicide.

If staying you decided, would my arms holding yours free you from your pain?
You chose dying and causing harm to yourself, unfolding your decree in vain.

I NEEDED you then…I need you now…how will my lost soul keep on existing?
I pleaded to you then…I PLEAD to you now…you lost control and kept resisting.

For every day I spent with you was the best memories I will always cherish,
you didn’t stay, I knew you’d get your way…for you always longed to  p e r i s h.
                                                                                                           
                                                                                                              
*Couplet with internal rhyme*
                                                                                                              
Couplet Time-Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Rick Parise

Date Written: August 21, 2016
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016


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Date: 8/29/2016 6:39:00 PM
Poignant poem well written hugs and keep going
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Date: 8/29/2016 4:18:00 AM
Very emotional piece, Laura. Congrats for having it placed highly...
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Date: 8/28/2016 6:29:00 AM
Congrats with your fine win, terrible loss of your sister, hope your continued writing gives you some sense of catharsis. The pain will lessen with time, but will be gone for good in the resurrection, soon to come!
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Date: 8/28/2016 10:52:00 AM
YES! How soon? lol It's funny when I say that some people think I'm crazy, but I'm sure you understand that we should all be looking forward to that day :) thanks dear John (lol DEAR JOHN???) what, am I writing you a letter or something??? :)-luloo
Date: 8/28/2016 5:26:00 AM
I lost a father to suicide, I can relate to this, and I believe those who hadn't suffered the loss can still feel the depths of anguish via your write. powerful and well done Laura. Hugs x
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Date: 8/28/2016 10:50:00 AM
oh my, so sorry Casarah, be blessed :)-luloo
Date: 8/27/2016 8:33:00 PM
A beautifully moving piece Luloo! Congratulations on your well deserved third place! 7 ; )
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Date: 8/28/2016 10:49:00 AM
thank you lovely Connie :)-luloo
Date: 8/22/2016 2:55:00 AM
Very well written Laura - you have a special talent. all the best, Mark
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Date: 8/28/2016 10:40:00 AM
thank you Mark :)-luloo
Date: 8/22/2016 12:18:00 AM
Such a touching write, so full of sadness and sorrow, nice couplets great rhyme! should do well in contest.
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Date: 8/28/2016 10:39:00 AM
thank you JOhn :)-luloo
Date: 8/21/2016 2:15:00 PM
Oh....! I feel your sadness in your poetry a lot of pain there. You are missing him like I am missing my husband that passed away in March. I feel your pain.
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Date: 8/21/2016 4:06:00 PM
Darlene, I am so sorry to here this news...it's about my sister...Be blessed :)-luloo
Date: 8/21/2016 12:59:00 PM
Karen inspires so many of your writes LuLoo - she would be so so proud of you my friend:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 8/21/2016 1:42:00 PM
yes she does lady...I miss her so much, and love her more :)-luloo
Date: 8/21/2016 12:28:00 PM
Nicely done, I enjoyed you writing once again.
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Date: 8/21/2016 1:42:00 PM
many thanks Ronald :)-luloo
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