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Loner's First Wish

I weaved us together by day
In my lonely room, marveled
At your features, your Pa's sole present,
Memorized the curve of tulips,
Unraveled your bold walk
Having accepted the unfamiliar,
I kept watch
For proof of our union.

Today I exhale as I view
Your perfect face, straight
Unpretentious; your sharpness
Moves me--that fingerprint
Only a parent can read.
I ease now beside you, grateful
And patient, to dip us,
With even breath
In time's clear ink.

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(Inspired by: Alison Kolodinsky's "Adoption"
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016


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Date: 3/16/2016 6:28:00 PM
Is this about a son or daughter? "that fingerprint only a parent can read." ... so endearing. Our uniqueness is personified by those we hold dear ... those last lines "dip us ... in time's clear ink" felt like you were merging your love of your child into poetry. An expression through ink on paper (though invisible ... because you can't put your finger on it) ... another great poem.
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Iris E. Sankey- Lewis
Date: 3/16/2016 8:04:00 PM
My first born, Deborah I'm talking about. I sat one afternoon in my lonely room and wished for my very own friend. Then not long after a Police Officer asked my guardian if he could take me to Xmas dance, I was seventeen had her at eighteen, didn't want to wed him. She's more of him. \
Date: 3/15/2016 12:40:00 PM
The accolade this piece deserves is a glory that stands in its own class. Great write friend and please continue to share your magnificent piece
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Iris E. Sankey- Lewis
Date: 3/16/2016 7:40:00 AM
Funom, I am delighted you visited with more warmth. Thanks dear one.
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