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Lonely

She lies in silence in her corner room,
so restless in the center of her bed,
recalling vows she made so long ago.
"For better for worse"--sweet words she said.

"For richer for poorer," she had vowed.
"Love, honor, and obey" came from the heart.
Their lives became as one; their beings joined. 
How could such unity be torn apart?

How many evenings has she sat alone
and asked her soul-deep questions of the night,
here in her little corner of their world
where shattered dreams might be imagined right?

He sits in silence in another room
in his domain for evening's retreat,
recalling one fine day so long ago
when promises and kisses were so sweet.

The golden bands, the wedding cake, her lace--
bright images of love that's just begun--
grew dim with time, and oneness slowly died
like waning brightness of the setting sun.

How many evenings has he sat alone
and wrestled with the loneliness he feels,
here in his little corner of their world,
regretting what his shadowed thoughts reveal?


written over thirty years ago


December 30, 2018, entered in Mark Toney's 2019 Poetry
Marathon, Mile 7          Placed 9th of 10

Date:  October 8, 2020
Contest: Impress Me with an Old Poem (002)         Placed 5th
Sponsor: Poet Destroyer A

September 15, 2021
Entered in the "L" Poetry Contest     placed 2nd
Sponsor: Constance La France
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Kauffman Avatar
September 22, 2021 at 11:17 AM
Janice, congratulations on your win. I really like the perspective of this poem from both sides illustrating the wedge of loneliness between two lonely people neither of which is willing to cross back to the other. Well done. Blessings! Prayers for all in this situation.
La France Avatar
September 22, 2021 at 9:56 AM
Janice, congratulations on your win in my L contest with your wonderful poem, splendid writing ~ love and serenity _Constance
Roper Avatar
October 16, 2020 at 11:08 AM
Congratulations on your win, Janice, such a sad poem. Hugs Eve
Canerdy Avatar
October 16, 2020 at 12:49 PM
Thanks so much, Eve. Janice
Gauthier Avatar
January 5, 2019 at 7:46 PM
Well penned, Janice. Congrats on your well deserved win.
Canerdy Avatar
January 5, 2019 at 8:21 PM
Thanks so much, Line! Janice
Toney Avatar
January 2, 2019 at 5:45 PM
Janice, congrats on your win on mile 7 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon contest. What a tragic situation these two find themselves in. They need counseling for sure! Thanks for sharing your Quatrain from 30 years ago... when you were 9, yeah? ~Mark
Canerdy Avatar
January 2, 2019 at 7:42 PM
Actually, I was 36 then. THANKS a million for placing my entry, Mark! Janice
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