Loneliness

The day is dark but the sun shines
The house is cold but the fire is on 
The stars are out but you don’t see them
This is what loneliness is

The book is a best seller but you can’t read the words
The story is good but you can tell no-one
You made a fantastic meal but there’s no-one to share it
This is what loneliness is

The bed is too large you have to much space
The joke is funny but who do you tell
You are in a crowded room but you are alone
This is what loneliness is.
© 11/09/2013

Contest Entry:  Loneliness.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 6/10/2014 10:34:00 AM
there is always somebody for someone they say,,yet this brings home the reality for so many
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Date: 11/12/2013 7:59:00 AM
Unfortunately, this is so true Mandy and I appreciate your stopping on my page.
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Date: 9/25/2013 4:37:00 PM
this is very good, Mandy, though I have to disagree with a few of these. I LOVE a big bed all to myself.hmmm, I actually enjoy about half these things even when alone. I think I am a more solitary person than most!!!
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Mandy Tams The Golden Girl
Date: 11/2/2013 4:46:00 AM
Love lying across the bed myself Andy lol xx
Date: 9/21/2013 9:48:00 AM
Dear Mandy, Congratulations, Have YOU been peeking into my life or do we share the Loneliness together, except if we share Loneliness then we are not alone. I LOVE YOU ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Brother...Harry
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Date: 9/18/2013 11:33:00 AM
Hello Mandy, This has touched my heart, So true and real are your words. I thought I saw my late husband the other day, this man looked so much like him. I followed him in the mall just so I could watch him walk away...That is what my loneliness has done for me. your words are beautiful dear poet. Lov, Shar
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Hgarvey Daniel Esquire
Date: 9/21/2013 9:52:00 AM
Dear Sharon, I have done the same thing with a Lenore look alike. I can feel YOUR Loneliness LOVE YOU ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Liege...Harry
Date: 9/16/2013 2:32:00 PM
Mandy great to read your work again, this is a little solemn but it is very well written and thought out it sums up a side of loneliness that often people miss, good luck for the contest...David
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Date: 9/14/2013 10:39:00 PM
Loneliness is excellently described in your excellent poem my very dear friend Mandy. I love it ( to my fave )and so enjoyed. Thank you so much for sharing and your congratulatory comments on my poem. Many, many heartfelt congrats also on your many recent wins. Sorry for the late expression. How I wish I'd more time at soup lately. Again, thank you so much & have a blessed wkend my dear friend! love much & biggest hugs, Leonora
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Date: 9/14/2013 7:04:00 AM
such a descriptive yet sad write capturing loneliness so well Kudos Shadow x smile
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Date: 9/13/2013 1:38:00 PM
I agree with you. That is loneliness. I wrote a poem like this once, but in Spanish. Thanks for sharing.... Lucilla
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Date: 9/13/2013 8:44:00 AM
loneliness in a crowded room, wow i have felt that so many times, but i was lucky, i found love!
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Date: 9/12/2013 4:57:00 AM
Loneliness nicely defined
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Date: 9/12/2013 12:53:00 AM
Hi, Mandy, you've expressed what loneliness is excellently - no one to share aspects of your life with- well penned.
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Date: 9/11/2013 11:59:00 AM
This seems to be lyrics to a sad country song.........it longs for soft, sad guitar music. Well done!
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Mandy Tams The Golden Girl
Date: 9/11/2013 12:20:00 PM
Thanks Carrie , you get the strings out love and I'll sing it lol xx
Date: 9/11/2013 8:42:00 AM
- Mandy, so sad ... and lonely .... what can I do to give your day a little joy .... - A BIG hug (?) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Mandy Tams The Golden Girl
Date: 9/11/2013 12:19:00 PM
a big hug is always appreciated Anne lise but this is just a poem of what I imagine loneliness to be like .xx
Date: 9/11/2013 7:57:00 AM
Yes, Mandy...I have felt this loneliness at times. My husband often travels and my daughter is studying abroad. I know of loneliness...Many dear, since it is for a contest, please check line 3...that should be SEE...also, the first line in the last stanza...the bed is TOO large. Just because I care!!! HUGS!
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Mandy Tams The Golden Girl
Date: 9/11/2013 8:06:00 AM
Thanks Eileen, I appreciate it love xx
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