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Lone Fish

I observed some tiny fish whose formation was a ball, But one fish didn't keep up too well and lagged a bit behind. He looked a lot like a soccer ref, ready to call a foul, But perhaps, his sense of circle had never been defined.

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Duke Beaufort

Date: 3/23/2024 7:12:00 AM

Hilda, I like this a lot. I wonder how many of us see ourselves a bit like that fish....slightly off. The way you describe it with this image is quite kind, imaginative, clever, and nonjudgmental. It's short but spectacular really...a genuine reflection on what the motivation might be.

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 3/23/2024 7:59:00 AM

Thank you for your comment.

Joseph May

Date: 3/4/2024 6:02:00 AM

I enjoyed this write, love the last two lines, Very nicely done

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 3/9/2024 7:06:00 PM

Thank you for your comment.

Howard Kerr

Date: 2/11/2024 1:44:00 AM

You have written a discerning rhyme based on shrewd judgement. An observational work on the dilemma one sometimes encounters in the decision making process. In response to your extraordinarily kind reflections on Wild And Free I did indeed invest a large amount of time on it

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/5/2024 10:45:00 AM

What a creative write. I really enjoyed it. Have a great day................

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 1/5/2024 4:36:00 PM

Thank you.

Bill Baker

Date: 12/9/2023 5:40:00 PM

An intriguing thought, Hilda. Sometimes there's nothing wrong, the fish just didn't fit in. Probably a poet. LOL, I enjoyed reading your poetry today, my friend. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us through your poetry! Have a pleasant weekend! Bill

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 12/10/2023 8:54:00 PM

I'm happy to know you liked this poem. I hope I never get too old to create pictures. Best wishes to you and Sara.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 12/3/2023 4:38:00 PM

I guess there are 'blowfish,' and also 'Slowfish.' ~ One-fish, two-fish, ... Dr. Seuss

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 12/3/2023 6:49:00 PM

I was hoping it didn't sound too Zeusish. The picture of the fish came from Dishscapes on Dish TV.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 12/3/2023 4:29:00 PM

An interesting and thought provoking, outstanding poem! Perhaps the lone fish 'swam' to the beat of a different drummer. I hope your week is nice. :)

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 12/3/2023 6:47:00 PM

Thank you. I do have a few Christmas plans that I'm looking forward to enjoying. I hope you have a pleasant Chtistmas season.

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/2/2023 7:16:00 PM

Hilda, here is a really fundamental and nice assessment of one of the living species! The final Verse of the poem is just brilliant!

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 12/2/2023 7:49:00 PM

Thank you Sotto Poet. Someone told me that members of the fish family do have various personalities.

David Fisher

Date: 12/2/2023 4:37:00 PM

Such a clever, fun write. Sounds like that fish was just a square.

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 12/2/2023 6:02:00 PM

Thank you for reading my poem.

Joe Dimino

Date: 12/1/2023 5:11:00 AM

Absolutely! The world needs rules, boundaries, and children above all need guidance. Excellent poem!

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 12/1/2023 5:32:00 AM

Thank you.

Speaks Volumes

Date: 11/30/2023 8:20:00 PM

A charming poem Hilda to liken a fish that lags a little behind was a perfect likeness for a Soccer Ref. I really like this poem.

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 12/1/2023 5:35:00 AM

Thank you for your comment on Lone Fish.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 11/30/2023 3:52:00 PM

a delightful poem, Hilda. I'm grateful for your empathy for the tiny, slow fish. The last line was most creative and made me smile. Have a great evening, Sara

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 11/30/2023 7:37:00 PM

Thank you for reading my poem.

Christina Bowring

Date: 11/30/2023 3:24:00 PM

What a delightful poem Hilda and so well written especially that last line. Poor little fish - you observed well and captured his unfortunate position. A thought provoking read. So enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing. Hugs to you. :):)

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 11/30/2023 7:35:00 PM

Thank you. I felt sorry for the fish too.

Deb M

Date: 11/30/2023 12:24:00 PM

A simple ,lovely observation of one of life's creatures Hilda! Great poem especially that last line! Debx

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 11/30/2023 7:33:00 PM

Thank you.

Ink Empress

Date: 11/30/2023 3:14:00 AM

You are such a deep observer and this is so heartfelt and soulful. Made me think deep too. Especially the last line. I think so too. Perhaps his sense of circle had never been defined. Pleasure always reading you

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 11/30/2023 6:45:00 AM

Thank you.

Di11y Da11y

Date: 11/30/2023 12:58:00 AM

This is a lovely one Hilda. I always watch the starlings and feel sorry for the one trying to work it out. Hopefully the fish was purposely taking an observational position

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 11/30/2023 6:43:00 AM

I hoped the same outcome and hope he is ok. Thank you for reading my 'animal' poem.