Lone

Sitting on the park bench The boy watches geese Ever so carefully As though he wants To be one of them. Is one of them At least for the moment. They swim across the pond Happily. Not a care in the world And with friends. The boy turns away. Starts crying Uncontrollably. The wind jabs me in my gut. I admit. I am still that boy.

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Kim Van Breda

Date: 10/5/2013 8:25:00 AM

Great imagery and introspection Jacob. I found this poem very deep and emotional-- well done.

Jacob Cra
Date: 10/12/2013 6:08:00 PM

Thank you so much! I usually write children's poems, with lots of creativity and rhyming. This took a bit more work to pull off. Thanks for the kind words... they're very meaningful.

Juli- Michelle

Date: 10/4/2013 9:47:00 PM

Oh my goodness, you captured my heart with this poem. So simple on the outside but so deep. I love love loved it. Don't believe I've read any of your work before... I should. Love, Juli-Michelle

Jacob Cra
Date: 10/12/2013 6:12:00 PM

Your kind words are much appreciated! As I said to Ms. Gorelick, I typically do not write poems of any deeper value. They're usually just simple little poems for kids. I am very glad to hear that you feel this way about my work. Your thoughtfulness and kindness means a lot!

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 10/4/2013 9:26:00 PM

A sad poem Jacob..Well written though..I like the format too. BG

Jacob Cra
Date: 10/12/2013 6:03:00 PM

Thank you! Your kind comment is much appreciated!