Locked In a Jar

Does the one who loves you know who you are?
She needs a real man not just a facade.
Don't keep your heart locked away in a jar.

Not being open she'll think you're a fraud.
She longs to share every part of herself.
She needs a real man not just a facade.

Your heart is out of reach on that old shelf.
Where she can see it but it's out of reach.
She longs to share every part of herself.

But you hold onto her just like a leach.
In the glass jar it looks so very clear.
Where she can see it but it's out of reach.

If you open it what is there to fear?
Are there dark spots you don't want her to see?
In the glass jar it looks so very clear.

Is it that you're afraid that she will flee?
Why won't you reveal every part of you?
Are there dark spots you don't want her to see?

There are some good men, be one of the few.
It's time to reveal every part of you.
Help the one who loves you, know who you are.
Don't keep your heart locked away in a jar.

Modified Terzanelle
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Robinson Jr. Avatar
November 17, 2016 at 10:05 AM
Beautiful truth, Richard. A very, very good terzanelle. This is a form, I believe I can excel in. The poem and message were both superb. Excellent write, my poetic friend. Love and blessings to you.
Hendricks Avatar
April 23, 2013 at 10:33 AM
Stunning write, Richard. I like your notion for men to reveal their inner selves. :)
Lamoureux Avatar
April 23, 2013 at 7:34 PM
Thanks Delysia. Often hard alway rewarding.
Mundine Avatar
April 18, 2013 at 11:40 PM
It's refreshing to read a poem written in a unique style by someone who has mastered that category. And the message is good advice for any man who wants a lasting committed relationship. Most of the ladies seem to applaud this work. Nice job.
Lamoureux Avatar
April 19, 2013 at 7:20 AM
Thanks for this very generous comment.
Manassian Avatar
April 18, 2013 at 7:42 AM
Lovely write, Richard. It has gone to my favorites.
Lamoureux Avatar
April 18, 2013 at 7:54 AM
Thanks Eileen
Stone Avatar
April 16, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Loved your poem and the good advice given! I really wish men will reveal their true feelings to their woman and not hide it! Well written!!
Lamoureux Avatar
April 16, 2013 at 7:27 AM
Thanks Rienie. Cool avatar
Jones Avatar
April 15, 2013 at 9:52 PM
Love this Richard..yeah I find most men and women are afraid to really let any one know the weakest link.
Lamoureux Avatar
April 15, 2013 at 10:11 PM
It is very liberating to share with the right person.
Bono Avatar
April 15, 2013 at 1:44 PM
wow,if you only knew how right you are on this one.This is definetly so true.take care and have a great day
Lamoureux Avatar
April 15, 2013 at 9:48 PM
Thanks Coleen
Widjanarko Avatar
April 15, 2013 at 9:10 AM
Another surprising thoughts of you Rick. This is such a lovely poem, indeed good woman needs good man to unlock the lid of her heart :) hug, Yanny
Lamoureux Avatar
April 15, 2013 at 12:44 PM
Thanks Yanny
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