Living In the Dark


It is the night, in deepest dark, that death foretells
the demon heart in which all lonely feeling dwells.

Yet, in plain sight, our eyes can’t see what life impels,
emotion’s plea, our deepest sorrow love dispels.

Blind are caustic ink filled visions, all light repels,
like charred decisions, ash from crematory tells
a tale where quietus intrepidity sells
the silent impetus toward a life of many hells.

Walled inside this ebon murk, my emotion wells;
beyond they lurk, those who are sane, their tale retells
how life is to live, and the end but brief farewells.

Though my will may bend, it is I that death compels.


02/16/2018

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 5/28/2018 5:20:00 AM
So amazing...loss in words. You are one of my favorite poets on here. (:
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James Inman
Date: 7/15/2018 7:48:00 PM
JW, I'm sorry I missed your wonderful comment. I don't get to visit as often as I would like anymore. Thank you for your kindness.
Date: 4/1/2018 8:00:00 PM
I like this deep, dark perspective you are writing from here ... You've also done an amazing job with the use of monorhyme and the flow of this poem, which is never easy to do ... Great work!
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James Inman
Date: 4/1/2018 8:13:00 PM
Thank you for your visits to my poems tonight Kelly. Your lovely comments have brightened my evening.
Date: 3/28/2018 9:03:00 AM
Wham, bam - sharp, crisp and straight on was this delivery of penetrating dark from your pen. This is a write that is hard to shake off and will stay with me for awhile (unless I go find comic relief from, say Jan's limericks). Very very good! Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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James Inman
Date: 3/28/2018 3:11:00 PM
Thank you again CayCay. (Jan and Viv are where I go when I need a smile.)
Date: 3/14/2018 2:40:00 PM
WoW! love every line. Glad you liked my Riding :)
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James Inman
Date: 3/15/2018 8:03:00 AM
Thank you for the sweet comment Debbie, glad you enjoyed my dark side (which is likely every side, lol).
Date: 2/24/2018 1:35:00 PM
James, I love this quietly emotive piece - perhaps, it appeals to my own dark side. I love the smooth flow, awesome monorhyme, and deep, powerful message! BRAVO to you! Hugs. Pandita
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James Inman
Date: 2/24/2018 2:04:00 PM
Thank you Pandita. A subject which seems never ending for me.
Date: 2/19/2018 12:10:00 AM
Very creative and compelling read, also dark and unsettling. Good luck in contest.
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James Inman
Date: 2/19/2018 7:48:00 AM
Thank you for visiting Susan. I'm glad you found interest in this. I think perhaps many readers may find the line "a tale where quietus intrepidity sells" to be awkward but the words were chosen intentionally to slow down the read at that point. If read carefully the continuity remains in that line as well as the 12 syllable count. Thank you again.
Date: 2/18/2018 12:54:00 AM
Hope this isn't autobiographical, James, but if so, keep sailing for the light. A fine write. Regards, Viv
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James Inman
Date: 2/18/2018 8:06:00 AM
Just a write for a contest Viv, but thanks for the advice.
Date: 2/16/2018 6:18:00 AM
Very deep and dark James, i hope you can find the light..
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James Inman
Date: 2/16/2018 11:13:00 PM
Thank you.
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