Liquid Sky Distortion

Lost in this Little, big world 
Of nightly sweats 
I see a road sign that diverts 
My attention to swerve 
Away and Wake up 
From the Reality around me ... 
I just need a break  
From it all, for awhile 
My eyes cross as I reach 
For the Blue something or other 
Ahaed of me 
I stop time for real this time 
Because it’s my time, me time 
To be real but not really 
Because I feel like I’m dreaming 
With my eyes wide open 
And everything seems so strange 
Around me as if 
God is trying to get my attention 
Somehow 
And for some reason everything 
Smells like plastic 
Leaving a metal aftertaste in my mouth ... 
I hear music in the distant clouds 
And my stomach rumbles like thunder 
Perhaps I’m hungry for something new 
Something different  
Where the earth beneath me is putty 
Sucking me in and averting my attention ...
Reminding me
I am Grateful to be Alive.

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Date: 8/7/2024 7:02:00 PM
Indeed. "Leaving a metal aftertaste in my mouth" sometimes the common life does that- how blessed to have poetry....enjoyed this one :)
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Date: 8/4/2024 10:04:00 AM
Indeed you are many blessings
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Benjamin Bartley
Date: 8/4/2024 8:59:00 PM
Thank you. Bless you too!
Date: 7/27/2024 1:14:00 PM
what an intriguing piece, a bit trippy, like one of my dreams! lol thanks for commenting on my work
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Benjamin Bartley
Date: 7/28/2024 9:55:00 AM
I toured the Dead for a road trip one summer long ago and yes, it was fun. It is always a joy to read your poems.
Date: 7/26/2024 10:21:00 PM
God is always so good. Your poem is awesome and heartwarming. I enjoyed reading it this weekend. Thank you so much for sharing my dear poet friend. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs
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Date: 7/25/2024 8:29:00 AM
Benjamin, I think we're all grateful for the gift of life....you describe what you are feeling so genuinely and in terms that I can imagine. Life is short indeed so make the best of it!!!
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Date: 7/24/2024 6:12:00 PM
When God wakes us up, we feel fully alive dear poet. I enjoyed your poem today
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Date: 7/23/2024 3:05:00 PM
Enjoyed your poem Benjamin….the last line summed it up nicely! Debx
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Benjamin Bartley
Date: 7/24/2024 8:41:00 AM
Thank you, Debx.
Date: 7/23/2024 4:54:00 AM
I wasn't expecting that last line it was a nice twist. The plastic odor and metallic taste had me thinking this fellow was on an LSD trip or similar. Very nice Ben
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Benjamin Bartley
Date: 7/24/2024 8:41:00 AM
That was my intent. Glad it was clear. Thank you.
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